the day is new

2010

                      Awakening consciousness as the weight

                      of my despondency clears the air.

                       Demons retreat under a glowing light,

                     my weakness in this war troubles me.

                    Unable to pull myself to confidence 

                           from despairs teary smear.

 

                  You must reach for me when they return.

                          Making known all signs of adversity.

              I will remove all infertility from my actions

                          and be prudent of derangement.

         We must communicate all issues with compliance.

                                                       My heart is yours.

               Zeal overwhelms my senses.

                                      My skin aches for your touch.

               Take my hand and know that my love is pure.

                My spirit is healed, my aspirations are lifted.

                  My longings met and my demeanor intact.

                   Dreams of forever walking by your side.

               The day is new and our Father is waiting

                 for us to take and it and make it ours.

Reviews

[Elijah Gleaves]

I like the hopeful ending. One thing as a writer I always try to challenge myself to do is to break the surface of the emotions or actions I'm trying to portray. To do that you have to show and not tell. You say in your poem, " My aspirations lifted, my longings met, my demeanor intact." But what images and descriptions can you give the reader to show that rather then just telling them?

[Spook_13]

The ending was good. I like The bible verses as well. The interpretation of them is well written.

[Daytonight]

Well done! Keep on penning.

[Jeremy Baker]

I quite like your interpretation of that passage of scripture, its very inspiring, encouraging and your poem reflects that aspect of it really well. Definitley a favourite!

[Andrea Vargas]

Very interesting, and powerful. You should be very proud of your work here (:

[PoppySilver]

Your imagination is powerful! :) You take poignancy and cast a spell over it in surreal but hard hitting threads!
Brilliant love
xoxo

[InkSlinger]

Always, a great read.. full of hope, and promise.. rise up, rise up and let the warmth of the sun wash your face with hope for a new day.

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

I like how the two pictures make me understand the poem more.

[Amila Jay]

A lovely write:)

[Enigmatic Soul]

Beautiful use of imagery and metaphor. Well done.

[Thrinna Mae]

"My spirit is healed, my aspirations are lifted."
Awesome poem...Stunning...I like the way you prepare such a great idea...Nice pic too! :)))