foreigner

04/2011

            shadows from a deeper plane surround

         desperate to drag this soul down

  I've never been this close to stepping off the edge

            thanks to the disarray from the cataclysm of my life

          take it back, this black mood that wont lift

  please don't perpetuate this horror

           I cannot stand this disgrace, this disenchantment 

         this all to familiar sense of overwhelming reality

  it is like dieing over and over again every day

          like chasing a light I can never reach yet it never goes away

         how could I lose someone that I adore so much

  I am left quite of hope, a foreigner in your land

           the wraiths will win the second you die

Reviews

[Aleyah]

I love the way you chose your words. They seriously are really intense and chilling in a peculiar way. Awesome poem!! I especially liked the beginning lines. They are my favorite.

[Spookers]

Um.... what to say? What to say? This is different for you, but it is good. I like the imagery put into it

[Ruth]

This seems different for you love...powerful, as ever! :) You are never afraid of voicing the most intense emotion..I admire your work! xx

[Rene Velez]

really cool scribe Josh, nice to see something new from you...

[sugar]

great imagry here
I just love the consept and the way you penned it
will be reading more of your writing:)

[Muse]

the wraiths will win the second you die

I agree with Kenneth, your word play is fantastic. A roller-coaster kind of a read. :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

Very cool wordplay. Impressive to say the least.

[Thea]

Creative poem...Nicely done... :)))

[Desmund Tiny]

Nice poem. I like it's imagery

[Samantha Heaton]

I really like this... I can relate to it alot to... but I like it alot! good job i'm looking forward to reading more of your post:)