daydream

daydream

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
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01/2012

"
I've pushed through the weeping branches

that grow out of the foliage surrounding your heart, 

I've stood among the yellow aspens and red maples 

that grow within our dusty memories, 

from time to time I've walked the beaten paths 

winding to and from certain moments

portrayed on these frayed pages, 

hoping to catch a glimpse of you, in a memory perhaps

somewhere forgotten, 

I will wait for you



© 2012 joshua deathdealer


Author's Note

joshua deathdealer
Thanks to Emily Burns for helping with the format.

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The imagery your words evoke is simply delightful: they have lots of texture, and the sound of nature with them. You use words in a deceptively simple way and it shows no sign of forced appearance; everything fits. I do believe, however, that this poem could benefit from being broke up - all of the commas and no periods to break it into sentences makes you feel as if you have to read it all in one breath. But other than that, wonderful work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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beautiful..

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the way you entertwine love and nature with your words. Seamless anaolgies, very well written. Thanks for sharing

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

your picture is pretty i wish i knew a place that looked liike that. i love the poem makes me feel like it was my daydream

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved the vivid images- yellow aspens, red maples associated with dusty memories....this was rich and colorful :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful imagery...I love the picture...It fits the whole piece very well...You've shown such creativity in this poem...
:)))

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh! its apparently a great write.. Trees ,nature related to the lost love .. sounds saddening .. Great job .. :-)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Added on January 13, 2012
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Tags: surreal, memories, love, romance, poetry

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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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"My trepidation of things past is not a song with a beginning, middle and end. But an endless symphony playing infinite variations on the same theme. One day of sadness fades into another and the .. more..

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