left behind

left behind

A Poem by light years in love
"

06/2012

"
yea it's okay
         she has just 
lost her way
          while I've been
searching for the 
           most unseen
 
I've been embracing
           tragedy and many pains
from many things that
            we can't conquer

one lie after another
            never a moment
of solid ground
            nor contentment 

inside out I stood
            in the devouring
flame as she fell 

upside down
             like everything
around her  

             slowly to her death
taking her love
            away from me

so very
           far away 
from me

© 2012 light years in love



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light years in love


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Ouch...if I didn't have such a good memory this poem might not hit me at such an emotional level...This form is new in your writing, at least to me and I like it. The drum beat in the song reminds me a bit of the form, in a good way.
You always seem to nail your emotions with lyrics and phrasing that draws in the reader even though the emotions are dark...Nicely done Joshua

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.



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Nice work, it was interesting poem I think many can relate to. When I find my headphones or home will definitely have to listen to the music you put along with it. Nice chose of emphasized words they almost fit together to say one meaning. Well done.

Posted 11 Months Ago


I loved the imagery..the images are well crafted..not over the top...but smooth...a great feel to this


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There is a sense of paralysis and pain mixed with helpless acceptance of whatever has occurred. It is sorrowful and one can relate to the emotion in many ways. Well written and structured. Keep it up.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great job..!!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your imagery must need its own house in your head. I hope it is well carpeted and furnished.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this!! I especially love the way you formatted it! The line breaks are interesting, and I like how you worked with the font to emphasize certain words. The music does indeed add to the effect. Awesome!!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Heartbreaking and beautiful..

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this sad, dark, and dramatic piece. I can feel the bottom drop from under me as I read this. It had a spiraling effect...emotions spiraling down. Excellent write.
The song is awesome, lending a melancholy tone to your art. Nicely done.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Haunting piece; written so well I am bathed in the pain. "...So very far away from me." The words hit hard, and the tunes added to the haunting.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very good! Very well written, and beautiful. I loved how you bolded some words. that just seemed to add to the poem. Great job!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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light years in love

Casket City, FL



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