Ouch...if I didn't have such a good memory this poem might not hit me at such an emotional level...This form is new in your writing, at least to me and I like it. The drum beat in the song reminds me a bit of the form, in a good way.
You always seem to nail your emotions with lyrics and phrasing that draws in the reader even though the emotions are dark...Nicely done Joshua
I love this!! I especially love the way you formatted it! The line breaks are interesting, and I like how you worked with the font to emphasize certain words. The music does indeed add to the effect. Awesome!!!
I love this sad, dark, and dramatic piece. I can feel the bottom drop from under me as I read this. It had a spiraling effect...emotions spiraling down. Excellent write.
The song is awesome, lending a melancholy tone to your art. Nicely done.
sorry I took a while to review, but things have been crazy, and I won't read if it doesn't get my full attention Josh, this is a great one, I've seen a lot of growth in your work lately, I love watching...better yet reading a writer grow, good work man, keep digging...
"My trepidation of things past is not a song with a beginning, middle and end. But an endless symphony playing infinite variations on the same theme. One day of sadness fades into another and the heav.. more..