left behind

left behind

A Poem by joshua deathdealer
"

06/2012

"
yea it's okay
         she has just 
lost her way
          while I've been
searching for the 
           most unseen
 
I've been embracing
           tragedy and many pains
from many things that
            we can't conquer

one lie after another
            never a moment
of solid ground
            nor contentment 

inside out I stood
            in the devouring
flame as she fell 

upside down
             like everything
around her  

             slowly to her death
taking her love
            away from me

so very
           far away 
from me

© 2012 joshua deathdealer


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joshua deathdealer


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Ouch...if I didn't have such a good memory this poem might not hit me at such an emotional level...This form is new in your writing, at least to me and I like it. The drum beat in the song reminds me a bit of the form, in a good way.
You always seem to nail your emotions with lyrics and phrasing that draws in the reader even though the emotions are dark...Nicely done Joshua

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.



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It's so sad, but beautiful at the same time. It's very touching. A wonderful poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sorry I took a while to review, but things have been crazy, and I won't read if it doesn't get my full attention Josh, this is a great one, I've seen a lot of growth in your work lately, I love watching...better yet reading a writer grow, good work man, keep digging...

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is dark and kinda hateful, painful, with nice imagery, nice flow and i like your font xD.. You expressed a heavy emotion here, and desperation flows in it.
Seriously, i have nothing else to say, amazing work!
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up :D

Posted 11 Years Ago


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i really like the format that it guides a strong love for her that is very far far away. nice. keep it up

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is so emotional and I love that most about it...it's great!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very interesting write, I loved the layout... it really involved the reader, and also encouraged them to read on. Awh i loved it, write more.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is such an emotional piece fill with hurt. Amazing job and the song was seriously great for the poem :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


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A tragic poem beautifully expressed and the song was perfect for this poem. It is so important that we save the lost souls before they get to a dead end road.

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Awesome! Very creative, unique and very well composed!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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Everything about this poem is awesome. The first stanza really drew me in as well.

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Added on June 8, 2012
Last Updated on June 10, 2012
Tags: romance, sad, dark, love

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joshua deathdealer
joshua deathdealer

Casket City, FL



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"My trepidation of things past is not a song with a beginning, middle and end. But an endless symphony playing infinite variations on the same theme. One day of sadness fades into another and the .. more..

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