Death.

I lie awake at night,

Dry tears tighten my face.

My eyes no longer bright,

I know I am the family disgrace.

 

I fight my way to find the light,

They say I need to find my place.

My heart burns with fright,

I may not make it with my pace.

 

All I need is to take one bite. ,

I stand in the mirror staring at my face.

I give up this fight.

I become a ghost of the night.  

Author's Note

opinions?

Reviews

[RBrmdz]

This hits me with the struggle of doing something to ourselves wevknow we shouldnt and those around us see but its hard to change. But i automatically went to eating disorder thoughts because of the part about taking a bite. Before that it made me think of a recovering addict. Im unsure if i got the right message but I realy felt this. Thank you.

[barleygirl]

Sometimes dark poems are too simplistic & bleak for me, but your poem conveys depth & details that are a sign of sophisticated writing, no matter what genre. These 2 lines are powerful:
"I know I am the family disgrace. "
"They say I need to find my place."
These 2 lines give us the idea that this narrator is being oppressed by her family or other outside forces that have convinced him/her that she's basically worthless. Such subtlety around a powerful topic such as possible family abuse is a sign of the depth I'm looking for in a dark poem. Here's hoping you & your loved ones have a great Christmas season (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[I am Nobody]

A very good poem. It has a such dark feelings for being short.

[Jason Baptiste]

Been there many times After the dark cold nights arrives warm sunshine filled days you can laugh at the frozen nights that's melting awaits Hahahaha Stay up

[Thepensiveplayer]

I think many of us can resonate with this piece. We all fall down and sometimes no one cares enough to help you. Yet, at other times the people that cherish you never want to see your light fade from the world. In my case, I'm the latter for you :) Don't stop writing because your pretty exciting.

[Kelli April]

My original thought was “bite of what”. And then I realized...really, it can mean anything. This poem (to me) meant taking just one bite of anything in your life that’s killing you. Love love love this.

[CreatureKane]

I love it! Don't let anything stop you from achieving what you want. Keep up the work!

[LostWorldDavi]

easily relatable , something everyone feels in their darkest hour. Beautiful

[Dreaming-Demon]

Deep feeling...i can relate so much. Thank you for sharing