Hearts to Dust

They are constant

and unabated.

Does he deserve this?

To be debated.

It is his own Hell

he has created.

She gave excuses,

yet belated.

Random reasons

darkly shaded.

Too late for truces,

love desiccated.

Cut and dried by

knife serrated.

Through my heart

left cremated.

And I am now placated

by the dust she made of it.

Reviews

[Kara Emily Krantz]

wow. surprisingly enough ( and i dont mean that sarcastically) i really like this! i dont think i have ever enjoyed a poem that chose to go abab over and over again as much as i just apprecaited this one! you managed to make the rhymes flow, and not be too forced or cliche or just inappropriately paired.

really impressssed my dear
hugs

[justjenn_2u]

A love for life, cut with a knife, the I Love You, dead (this came to mind after reading). The words flow smooth, nothing seems forced - a good write!!

[Mr. Deft Diction]

I like the frantic flow of this. When I read it, I was instantly speeding thru this, however the speed was b/c I felt like there was something that I needed to get over, with the reading of this piece. And as the ending would have it, I hurried away from the inevitable. Well done poem.

[Choosing Life]

I love this...
It is overly done. I am the long winded poet so I respect and enjoy reading full content stated
perfectly with few words...

This impressive because it tell the heartache story so well.

[April Child]

Yep love is hurting and being hurt.

Cut and dried by
knife serrated.
Through my heart
left cremated.

You tell it well. I like the use of the short lines, no wasted words.

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

This was wonderfully expressed. Great job. I loved the lines....
"love desiccated.

Cut and dried by

knife serrated."

Cool. So descriptive.
Thank you for sharing.
Love All, Mejasha

[Tai Chi Italy Take Two]

I think it takes two, was my first thought, but I liked the rhyme scheme and the way it pounds down the page to your placation in her dust....LLB wishing you a happy monday

[Tally]

This is a good piece. Well written, emotive and personal all at the same time. Loved it.

[O!]

someone who knows his language well and uses it beautifully....profound yet very telling...an amazing feit achieved here.

Thank you.

x,
O!

[Erin Phoenix]

Through my heart
left cremated.
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Thats awesome. :)