Timber

A poem of conniving, evil trees

It was a dark, cold night in the forest near town.

Jonathan R. Graves decided to head down.

Down to the woodland, full of hatred and death,

Down to the woodland, where he'd breathe his last breath.

Unknowingly, of course; he was not suicidal,

But the woods outside of town were homicidal.

They thirsted for blood in a demonic manner,

And their ringleader was a fiendish planner.

He devised an attack on the poor old guy.

That would send the man's soul up to the sky.

He gathered his band of possessed trees,

And said this to them with a pronounced wheeze:

"Tree One, Tree Two, Tree Three, Tree Four,

Here's what we'll do with he who we abhor:

We'll grab him as he walks through the path,

Then we will show him our pine-scented wrath.

We'll poke him, prod him, do as we please,

Then I will beat him to his knees.

I'll crush his pathetic human skull,

Then his life will become null."

The trees all raised their limbs and cheered.

The leader stroked his leafy beard.

"The time has come, the time is now;

Bring me that vile, filthy cow."

The underling trees did as they were told.

The sight of these "creatures" was much to behold.

They grabbed poor Jonathan R. Graves;

In his mind he hoped that Jesus truly saves.

But nobody can escape the Ire of the Forest,

Not even an exceptional florist.

Jonathan R. Graves was never again seen,

And the forest remained healthy and green.

 

Reviews

[Dutch Jr.]

Pretty nice write, I honestly like this one. Just watch your line breaks, which is something I didn't mention in the last review. You should put commas or periods at the end of each line of the poem, unless that line is meant to be read continuously. For instance:

But nobody can escape the Ire of the Forest
Not even an exceptional florist

You should probably insert a comma after "Forest," because, if you don't, I take it like you want me to read the whole thing without pausing.

[The Uncommon Muse]

wow...loved this one...truly the only criticism would be to watch your line breaks and your meter...but you invoke wonderful imagery and I love your thymes.

[Allison]

I Love it!!

[Livana Lowell]

Same here, I think this so kawaii as well.

Those monstorous trees, and their devious boughs stretching to grab and grasp and never let go.

A true monster of nature and the end captivated me so. Demonic, evil, hidden well, they continue to expand and grow.

I won't dwell on what Dutch said because it's true. Anyways, I complement you for sharing, I do.

[deeps]

We'll grab him as he walks through the path,
Then we will show him our pine-scented wrath.

Amazing lines here, This is wonderful
and ever so poetic.

[J.M. Barrett]

"We'll grab him as he walks through the path,
Then we will show him our pine-scented wrath.'

Wow, this literally made me laugh out loud!
I loved it.

"The trees all raised their limbs and cheered
The leader stroked his leafy beard"

You took personification to a whole new level. :P

Fun poem! :]

[Taylor H.]

LOVE THIS!

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is very good. Don't under estimate the power of nature. I like the story and the ending was very good. Nature should be protected. We need fresh air to breath and clean water to drink. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Dupree]

wow. i love this.