Care Taker

Care Taker
I came across a broken heart
Left in pieces on the floor
I am here to put it back together
So it can be held once more

For a heart so fragile
Pain is all you knew
Lost is yet another love
You’ve lost more than a few

Given time we all shall see
At times it seems too late
Growing slowly out of patients
Where is true love it can’t wait

Time is moving forward now
And peace is in the distance
For you it moves too slowly
You struggle with resistance

So listen to my words
And take them to heart
Let go of your past
And you will find where to start

For you will find love again
And true it shall be
For I am the care taker
I am here to set you free

Reviews

[Dawn Davis]

Joe wow! I loved this one as well! you say you have to know whoi this one is for and I am curiouse was it the ex??? The one up there???? If so I do understand but you are a fixer for everyone that is your nature! LOL Great write from a great soul! VERY OUTSTANDING WRITE HUN! WAY TO GO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Joe S]

I think i do know which part you are talking about. I also should tell you there was a very specific reason behind every word. I wanted to create a little conflict in the mind of the reader so they can relate to the person i wrote this poem for. I think relating to the person a poem is written about is key to a good write and read. I appreciate the review

[Tony Woods]

I like this, it's a nice simple poem that flows well and seems to "stick to it's guns", I don't really know what that means, but my brain told me to say that about the poem.

My only complaint about it is that some of the rhymes, I don't know maybe I'm wrong, but they seem a little forced. They don't interrupt the flow, and they stick to the theme, so it's not a crippling problem, and I actually could be wrong, you may have written all of this with very little thought (as far as the rhyme scheme goes) at all, but it just seems like it may have been forced a little bit, not too bad, just a little.

I usually point out in poetry reviews that poetry is not my specialty, I usually go with my heart on these reviews rather than my head, so I could be totally off on any criticism, but overally I think it accomplishes what it's supposed to, just read it over and see if maybe you can see where I'm coming from on the rhymes, I dunno, maybe I'm dead wrong, but nice and simple, I liked it.