Ashes of Love

its a imagination about one-sided love

Ashes of memories, left with me,
when you were sixteen and i fifteen,
you cared for me, so kind you were,
but i misunderstood our frienship for love.
i am stupid, i must confess;
for i had desired,
the things i didnt get.
if i had to blame,
there is no one, except me,
because you didnt knew what i feel.
you were so perfect as a friend,
it was me who puzzled things.
now you are far, m left with this,
the ashes of love, almost kill.
you will be always in my heart,
i will carry till death,
these ashes of love.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Saddam]

A marvelous piece that brought my days back.....
That was the day when every teen find love in their friend.
Great write dear friend.

[ayesha gupta]

thanks saddam. its nice to know that i reached your memory.

[Sophy Freebirds]

I must say i still blush when i see my first crush. They were the days of wide eyed love. We were naive enough to think love is a bed of roses. But we used to overthink also. I felt the hurt here..it was a heartfelt piece . You have some typos and grammos here. Like if you are a poet go for total am not only am. Secondly you have wrote "you didn't knew what i feel" knew is in past tense so the verb should be in past tense too. Go for felt. Overall a sweet li'l piece :)

~Sophy

[ayesha gupta]

yep. true..tense is past there ,but "felt" didnt fit..it seemed odd, so i ended up using "feel".
read moreyep. true..tense is past there ,but "felt" didnt fit..it seemed odd, so i ended up using "feel".
thanks a lot for your review. i will try to improve. :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

God bless.:) was a pleasure

[Prabha Salimath]

At that age girl or boy feel that love only, that little care and warmth make feel them like that. Nicely written. Strict upbringing keeps the teen people safe sometimes ( although I don't support that ).

[ayesha gupta]

thanx for writing review.

[Kuandio]

Hi there, stopping by because you reviewed something of mine. I felt this poem in the heart. I've had many experiences like this, as a teenager, and all through my 20s,,, soooo many regrets, lost chances of love. Now I feel like all I ever had were ashes, maybe that's all I'll ever have.
"the ashes of love almost kill."
The last lines of your poem are great

[stars are far]

that was very well done, i loved work, well done

[ayesha gupta]

thanx a lot

[Sreenath]

this is exactly what that happened in my life. i could very well relate it to mine ... often some relationships are either misunderstood or not desired . if they tend to leave then we must better let it go!!!!. i think time is a big healer .... as time goes on it gets healed . and if you really deserve the relation don't worry it may bounce back sooner or later.. this is a great piece with glimpse of emotional touch.. i liked the title even more, ashes of love that shows it has been burnt and no more don't worry phoenix takes birth from ashes this poem is phoenix of your imagination.. enjoyed reading it.. keep smiling peace :)

[ayesha gupta]

thanx shree, for your awesome review.
and m not hurt by that incident anymore, cuz God had already made my match..n my life is now not less than a fairytale. so, everything happens for gud.

[Mayank]

emotional piece of our teen days, never forgotten.

[ayesha gupta]

yep. but it makes us more aware of having feelings for someone next time.

[Caradoc]

Beautiful, poignant, and sad. It reminds me of the song "Shamandalie" by Sonata Arctica, which is also about unrequited young love.

Well done.

-Caradoc

[ayesha gupta]

never heard that song. i will search about it on net. thanx for review.

[Caradoc]

You are most welcome.

[RaeStems]

Very strong emotions, I love it.

[ayesha gupta]

thanx 4 review

[Coyote Poetry]

"the ashes of love, almost kill.
you will be always in my heart, "
Love can burn our heart and mind forever. Young love is never forgotten. First kiss and sharing laughter. The kind and sweet days of love. Love can break our heart. Later in life. We will look back and be glad. We had loved and held crushes. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[ayesha gupta]

:-) thanx for review.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.