The great Friday night philophiser

Working day done
Suit of armour off
Old t shirt on
Dog fed
Red wine bled
Shoes kicked
Almost across the street
Hose sprinkler on
Sunsets on
Dog yawns
Son comes with washing
For yet another morn
Birds chirping
Till the dusk has gone
Mumma sits and ponders on
Cars screech
To the Friday night
Bandstand heat
It beats
Thump thump goes my brain
I try in vain
No words will come
To soothe my furrow brow
So now I turn my might
To just another movie
Wordless night

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Thanks Einstein and Emma
Sorry for belated replies

[emmajoy]

'.. Mumma sits and ponders on ~ Cars screech ~ To the Friday night ~ Bandstand heat ~ It beats ~ Thump thump goes my brain ~ I try.. .. '

You've built your own movie here, line by line, scene by scene. Slow and slowly you paint your mood, the how it is before sitting back is the only thing left to do.. no choice but - somehow, welcome til.. it all begis again.. I just have to call this a carousel of bright miniatures equalling a masterpiece!! . Love it. Has heart.

[Einstein Noodle]

i just sit here and smile ..love the first part in getting home and kicking back .. so relatable ... especially like this:
"Shoes kicked
Almost across the street "
you put me in the hood Julie .. kicked back i see the yard, sprinkler, sun go down and the night waking .. i'm just too burned to do a damn thing ... and so i sit ...with my philosophizing and me movie ;}
E.