the house guests

the house asleep at night

i close my eyes

i shut my mind

the locusts blur

its all left behind

my pillow sweats

i toss and turn

what a peaceful

mind

when will i truly find

in the other rooms

the teddies play

they are on the floor

at end of day

my dogs toys

old chicken and old bear

they run to

safety of a shelter chair

the 3 buddhas

grinning there

they sit transfixed

with ears and eyes

and yes no hair

they start to move

their tight muscles

they stretch and yawn

before the dawn

the kettle brews

a pot of tea

for porcelain dolls

they are thirsty see

they drink with

pinkies in the air

just like their owners do

they learnt from somewhere

the paintings on the wall

do move

the pictures make a movie too

the flower blooms to full capacity

the surf it roars for all to hear

the trees they sway in gentle dignity

the clock it strikes just pre dawn time

all go back to being dumb deaf and blind

they close their eyes

their wooden hearts

they ache for night to come again

so that they can dance and sing and come

to life again

i awake and see the time is high

its time to shower shine and greet the

birds that  fly i

i trip on dogs toys underfoot

oh jakey boy my dog youve been a busy boy

bringing all your toys to me

i toss them back to where they all should be

jakes asleep under my bed there

he hadnt moved an inch from there!

that night

he didnt dare!!!

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

A magical romp through dreams. Great imagery. Lydi**

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

thanks so much for your kind review

[Nila M.]

Enchanting! Well done getting those words to dance. The imagery is very vivid and magical. I could see it.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

thanks for your lovely review, glad you could see it

[wredit.jordan]

I love the rhymes and it flows nicely. It had a fantasy ring to it with the toys coming to life. I'm sure many children felt that their toys were real. It brings me back to my childhood. Good work!:)

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

thankyou glad it brought some memories back for you

[emipoemi]

I have to say, I could hear a song in this as I read it, and the strong vivid imagery is solemnly reminiscent of Good Night Moon. However, the mention of the dog in the last stanza kind of brings it all down.....and the ending feels anticlimactic because of it. But everything else is great. Well done!

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Thank you for your honest review I agree with last comment but felt it brought something else like jerking back to mornings reality the dog had seen the toys at night and hadn’t budged from under bed

[barleygirl]

This is a brilliant depiction of some ordinary scene from everyday life. It takes a true master to tell such a plain story while making every inanimate object come alive with personality or memories or conjecture. This is a marvel, how you do that. I can feel the sneaking around the house, as if everything else is still awake, but not. Just in your imagination. So cool to pull off such a lively scene & your details are so delightful, unbelievable! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Wow thanks Margie for your wonderful descriptive review like a story itself ! Thank you

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

you are the master I am not margie im so amaeteur compared to everyone here

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

stupid ill probably delete!

[barleygirl]

BAD GIRL! Deeply disagree! *smile*

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Lol ok
I won’t delete