He and Me

He and Me

A Poem by Kalpit

The poem is self explanatory!

I see an Ambitious boy in me,
who just wants to be free,
having dreams in his eyes,
tries to come out, even when I pee..

Suppressed by others, he suffers
to do something big, and glitter,
'follow his dreams' is all he wants to do,
it's my life s***ers, who the hell are YOU?

'What will happen if he doesn't succeed?'
It's my life, I AM ready to take the risk!
Money is nothing but a piece of sh*t,
in his definition of 'success', it doesn't fit..

His dreams are ruined,
by the people's 'conservatism,'
they are so, so cruel,
to someone's priceless 'ambition..'

I see an ambitious boy in me,
who wants to follow his dreams,
you have to trust him and me,
he is not as incapable as he seems..

He just wants to follow his dreams. . . . .

© 2011 Kalpit

Author's Note

It isn't as good as I've expected.

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Posted 6 Years Ago

Pee . . .. caught me out. Urination "the act of relieving ones self of urin". That is a different way to get a readers attention. But you got mine. The rest including the profanity was a downer. Sorry but your images were colored with the word Pee.....

Posted 7 Years Ago

it's good, the peeing part doesn't seem to fit here, a little tweak and you should be good...

Posted 7 Years Ago

Word flow and imagery just brilliant

Posted 7 Years Ago

nice work......actually it is good...the words and how it flows are great.... ^^,

Posted 7 Years Ago

It is because you DON'T see....
You are talent, a dreamer, chin up.
You impress me:)

Posted 7 Years Ago

As long as you have hope, and your willing to work hard, your dream will always have wings!

Posted 7 Years Ago

It has a nice flow to it, and a great message. Written quite well.

Posted 7 Years Ago

You always have interesting facts. But your poems give inspiration.

Posted 7 Years Ago

Love it... very awesome! the style, flow, word use... all good in my book. I love the most how it captured me. the censored swearing is cute, to say the least. but awesome job.

Posted 7 Years Ago

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17 Reviews
Added on October 14, 2011
Last Updated on October 14, 2011
Tags: myself, ambition, follow dreams, goal, my dream



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