SAND BREADS

SAND BREADS

A Poem by Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram
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Motherless boy's flashback

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SAND BREADS

 

One good rainy day,             

The wet sand in the hands of a boy!

With the help of plastic box;

The ovan ready for bread making..

Filling the wetsand in the box,

The hot breads are ready!

Calling his friends to eat....

Yes the assembled friends ,

Joined their hands as guests!

Really they pretends like eating...

Whether the host relished or not,

His brain screened a flashback...

With his mother, a breakfast of ...

Oven made sweet breads!

 

..............Ka Na Kalyanasundaram.....

© 2012 Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram


Author's Note

Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram
Small boy's life without his mother

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Mothers are so great and I am lucky to have mine, though I almost never see her. There are times that I think about my days as a young child and it feels a little better. Thank you, once again, for a fabulous piece of writing. You never let us WC readers down! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Nice images, great job with making us dip into a "remote memory", just a tip: use less "!" and use more comas insted of "..."s

Posted 11 Years Ago


Awww, this is such a joyful and happy poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Love the title, love the poem. Love the last three lines.
Good job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


In the 4th line, you've got "oven" misspelled i think.

A wonderful poem. An intense powerful piece actually.
The theme is very touching.
Wow.

Posted 11 Years Ago


It is nice to see a longer poem from you. I like how you talk about the friends all joining together as guest. This poem showed the unity of the feast and the sanctity of friendship.

I also like the idea of the flashback, but I think that it would be nice if you wrote about the specific memories the boy had in the flashback. When I started to read the poem after I read the title I expected this poem to include that. It is a solid poem without it, and I did enjoy it. although I do think that the specific memories would add to the poem overall.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Brilliant poem! I liked the meaning behind it, and I think it should have been 'oven' instead of 'ovan' and 'oven made' instead of 'ovanmaked'. Keep writing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


A very beautiful poem for our loving mothers, I love it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Mothers are so great and I am lucky to have mine, though I almost never see her. There are times that I think about my days as a young child and it feels a little better. Thank you, once again, for a fabulous piece of writing. You never let us WC readers down! :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So touching.

I used to make my pretend bread with mud and baked in the hot summer sun. You should have seen my daddy's face when I expected him to eat it. Priceless.

Posted 15 Years Ago


I can feel the sadness underlying this poem. Well done!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on January 4, 2009
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Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram
Kaa Na Kalyanasundaram

Chennai, India



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I am very glad to enrol in your web. I am a Haiku poet. My poems are already published in the name of ' The Smile Humanity' - poems with humanity behaviour. I received an award of " Pavendar Award" .. more..

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