See

It's painful to see.

Your love for him growing stronger.

None given to me.

Can't grasp this much longer.

 

Not me.

It's him.

This hurt will never drift.

Can't get.

What I thrive.

Love is not a gift.

 

I am seeing a never ending Mirage.

As I continue to chase you, with no chance of success.

The only thing that love attracts is distress.

 

Yet I welcome it.

As if it is wanted.

And now I cannot forget.

And I am still being haunted.

 

Please, set me free.

Rejecting.

Accepting.

That's all that I need.

 

But one thing I won't do.

Is leave without trying.

I need to either be with you.

Or get closer to dying.

 

Although it may hurt, I will thank you deeply.

Because all that I want, is for you to see.

The real me.

Who truly.

Loves thee.

With one last plea.

Please set me free.

Reviews

[Stephanie]

Absolutely beautiful Kam. (Mind if I call you Kam?) It brought tears to my eyes. You express the complications, the amazing highs and agonizing lows that love seems to throw at us. One of my favorite lines has to be:

"As I continue to chase you, with no chance of success.
The only thing that love attracts is distress."

Love is crazy, pure and simple. I really can't get over how much I love this. Even before I reviewed it, I instantly clicked the favorite button. Kam, you just stunned me. Lovely write :)

[Victoria Harlequin]

There is a lot talent here.
This has a lot of emotion, and I can feel it.
Great write!

[Killian]

Building off from the previous reviewer, I believe that poem's need no structure, there is no such thing as an "elementary poem" because a poem is an expression of feeling of anything or even of nothing on paper, on walls, on wherever one decides to place it, and what you've written IS an expression. You wrote what you needed and wanted to and I enjoyed it, its theme, its structure.
I connect with your poem, very well, only i differ in feelings by the end. It is very true to oneself, a cry or like you said a "plea" to "thee" longing.
A very emotional poem, and I liked it very much
Again friend keep up the good work!!!

[Kortni]

This is amazing! You're really talented :)

[free ronnie radke!]

this poem really evokes emotion out of me. i can really relate, and it's beautifully written. amazing job

[The DuchessPoet]

First and foremost, young talent, I don't want you to EVER get caught-up in reviews that comment on your style and your lyric without offering you something that will help you grow or in some way improve your deliverance!
I'm no poet but I do enjoy writing and I'm not sure what your review from Micheal Lopez meant, nor do I understand his meaning of "elementary" and I'm saddened that he didn't find it ethically decedent to explain his simplistic review...
Perhaps when I read his work I'll get a better understanding...?
There are many different styles of writing, some use stanza's that are three lines of five, and seven,
using five syllables in each-line that do not rhyme,
as well as others that are made up of two lines that do rhyme...
So, elementary is a ridiculous description and terribly immature!
You've got form and a very expressive style! So, keep writing!
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In my view, this a very expressive piece that takes us into the heart of the protagonist who desires to have the love of someone, that he fears is in love with someone else... His emotional vacuum keeps him in a state of confusion which is clearly articulated in poem
Your Words:
"I am seeing a never ending Mirage.
As I continue to chase you, with no chance of success.
The only thing that love attracts is distress.

Yet I welcome it.
As if it is wanted.
And now I cannot forget.
And I am still being haunted.

Please, set me free.
Rejecting.
Accepting.
That's all that I need.

Very well done, my young talent, very well presented!

Your friend and Fan,
The Duchess...

[Alyssa]

this is good, i feel the depth and the passion in what your coming across.
nice work

[Michael Lopez]

im no good....
when i see poems like this i think elementary....
but im no expert...
i see what your saying,
but like the rhyming shceme doesn't go with all the hurt you feel

[BeautifulDisaster]

Wow this is amazing and beautiful.
I can feel the love you have for this person and it is very strong.
Its like your emotions just came flowing out.
My favorite lines were:

I am seeing a never ending Mirage.

As I continue to chase you, with no chance of success.

The only thing that love attracts is distress.

I like the description right here.
Very good job. :D

[Voice]

This is very beautiful and deep. Your emotions come through so clearly I can hear you begging to be loved. Amazing poem�

Voice