Twice

You’ve only been gone one day; one morning, really. But you know what it feels like?
                                                                                                                                  Twenty years.

And you know what twenty years without your love feels like?
                                                                                         Like s**t.
                                                                                         Like I can’t be happy cause I miss                                                                                                                                 you so much.
                                                                                         Like I can’t go through one action                                                                                                                                 without thinking about what we
                                                                                         did that last year, day,                                                                                                                                                           night.

But you’ve only been gone one morning, one hour, really.                           
           But it feels like I’ll never see you again.
                      Which I might not.                                          
                      But maybe I will.

But you know what that wondering feels like?
                                                                   Like Hell.                                                 
                                                                             Because you’re consuming my thoughts                          
                                                                             and I can’t focus.
                                                   So thanks for that.
                                                                   Like an unbearable weight.
                                                                   Like if I don’t tell you what I think right                                                                                                                                                                                   now,
                                                                                                                    I might                                                                                                                                                                                     just                                                                                                                                                                                      fall                                                                                                                                                                                           apart.

I missed loving you                                         
                         once,
                                    but hopefully not
                                                           twice.

Author's Note

Apparently, I'm kind of into unconventional poetry right now, since this is two in a row. But I'm into unconventional writing in general, so hopefully it's not too much of a stretch.

I had some problems with just the placement of my lines, so hopefully that doesn't get messed up on y'all's computers/phones/etc, but if it does, feel free to ask questions! I hope y'all like this piece because I do.

Reviews

[Adam Adams]

What an evocative piece it is!

I kinda love the analogy of "Once" & "Twice". It portrays so many insights (love-visions) in words; paints enormous amount of deepen thoughts ov'r emotions. Very heartfelt write you've come up with! Yes exactly, the write belongs to your earlier piece of art called "Two Sides". "Two Sides" seemed to be a visionary/flashback version of the write "Twice" that further impacting the hearts... with magnificence. The thing that makes your stuffs strong enough to beloved's "emotions" that you well stream down to your breathtaking pages. I'm very glad that I read this write & understand how true your words are - systematically phenomenal - for love. Excellent Work, Kess!

[K.]

Yes, now that you've read and responded to both pieces, I can see even more how they are increasingly related! This, especially, is one of my pieces that is more true than the others, and is spoken almost solely from the heart, instead of my mind, which makes it one of my more favorite pieces; but of course, I am so indecisive I can hardly pick favorites.

Thank you so much for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Cherry Pepperweb]

Missed opportunities are hard to come by a second time so we feel all the more protective, appreciative and on some level afraid too. I like this, totally relatable.

[K.]

I'm glad the point and feeling came across; this is one of my favorite poems I've written.

[Ryan Jaimz Knight]

Really, really good! I love the style and the imagery you used to describe the emotions in this piece. It hit home due to a similar situation a member of my family is going through right now - separation from someone they love. Well done!

[K.]

Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it! And I hope I portrayed it well enough! Thank you again!

[Emily]

I really enjoyed reading your poem. You captured the loss of love very well. I thought the ending to the poem was great too.

[K.]

Thank you. I'm glad the feelings came across as strongly as I had hoped- desperation, sadness, and intention. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

[paul sal.....]

some one said "love hurts" and your words paint that pain brilliantly....

[K.]

Thank you so much. What a nice/brilliant way of putting it :)

[~]

An emotional write. The lines placement seems to cascade well with your thoughts.

[K.]

Thank you! And I tried to structure it with a scrambled thought idea.

[Craig2591]

"I missed loving you
once,
but hopefully not
twice."

Definitely the best line of the poem. I think the placement came through fine. I like it.

[K.]

Thank you!! And yeah, after I posted it, I unpublished it and worked on the spacing for about 45 minutes, haha.

[Craig2591]

As an artist I understand that sort of obsession.

[Jamestown]

Well written and expressed!
I could feel emotions flowing in this piece:)
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[K.]

I'm glad my meaning came through!! Thanks for reading and commenting, Jamestown!

[Coyote Poetry]

The test of love.
"I missed loving you
once,
but hopefully not
twice."
The yearning and the needing. Leave us wishing for things we cannot have. Thank you Cassie for reading and the comment.
Coyote

[K.]

"The yearning and the needing." That's good! Thank you Coyote for reading!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Stan Lee]

Nice work Kassie. :) The strong language conveys a lot of bitter emotion and the formatting really add to the feeling.
Great poem - thanks for sharing. :)

[K.]

Yes, I really tried to convey that bitter and painful feeling of losing a love, and I'm glad it worked! Thank you!