Candle Wax and Burns

Candle Wax and Burns

A Poem by that-little-green-monster
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Fiction.

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A candle that burns twice as bright,

Burns half as long.

We burned so bright,

But exstinguished so quickly.

 

You let the candle wax drip down,

We didn't care where it fell.

In the end I was the one that got burned.

 

Nothing makes sense anymore,

You said you loved me then you left me.

And I guess you just got bored.

What did I ever do to you,

But love you.

 

A candle that burns twice as bright,

Burns half as long.

We burned so bright,

But exstinguished so quickly.

 

You let the candle wax drip down,

We didn't care where it fell.

In the end I was the one that got burned.

I was the one that got burned.

 

In the end,

I got burned,

And you didn't care.


© 2012 that-little-green-monster



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Oh my my, this is a beautiful piece indeed. I know how it feels to get "burned" from a relationship. I love, respect, and care for the guy but in the end it doesn't even matter. As hard as I tried, in the end I always got hurt. You expressed yourself well. I love it even more since I relate to it. I know there are other writers that have been through this, too. Great job once again :)


Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This is... amazing. loved the burning concept. Amazing.

Posted 5 Years Ago


A tale of short lived, yet passionate and reckless love. So sad and yet so romantic.
'Captain

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very good poem here. Such a lot of emotion expressed - great.

By the way - it's "extinguished" - no extra 's' required!

Keep on writing :-)

Posted 5 Years Ago


I LOVE THIS!!! A perfect, heartfelt, heart wrenching, and burning image of what it feels to be cast away by one you love and who said they loved you as well. The imagery of a furiously burning candle that extinguishes itself in passion messily, yet scathingly is probably the best usage of metaphor for this type of situation and feeling. I love the repetition in the piece, especially since I feel like I could read that stanza over and over again, absorbing the light of its meaning. I feel the pain of the burn and the searing colds the one who left leaves behind.

An amazing piece. A piece that reminds you what art, poetry, and writing really seeks to be.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this! very good writing :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


I love it :), it's so dark and beautiful just the way I like it

Posted 5 Years Ago


BEAUTIFUL!

I really did adore this, I think I am going to show this to my friends they'll love it too!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh my my, this is a beautiful piece indeed. I know how it feels to get "burned" from a relationship. I love, respect, and care for the guy but in the end it doesn't even matter. As hard as I tried, in the end I always got hurt. You expressed yourself well. I love it even more since I relate to it. I know there are other writers that have been through this, too. Great job once again :)


Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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