Ghost Ship

Ghost ship i see in the distance

Why dont you come save me?

My heart is no longer beating

I need off this long forgotten place

 

Ghost ship i see in the distance

Why dont you come save me?

My family is forever gone

I see you coming towards me

 

I step aboard and look around

Dancing and merriment is all around

I blink once and its all gone

All that is left is an old ghost ship

Reviews

[Steve]

Very nice! I like this style. I can really relate to this one.

[x]

Then you get out your matches and set fire to that old lady ghost ship and it's flare will be seen far and wide and hopefully, hopefully, your prayers will be answered by way of a rescue...
Lets run with that..

Nice post..thanks.

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[Liz-z]

"Why don't you come same me?"

I liked how that single line was repeated
"All that is left is an old ghost ship"
Fantastic! Love it's dramatic ending! lol :D

[Chilson, Joshua]

Just as they say, the grass is never greener on the other side, this as well run's along the same line. We all wish to be saved, yet in the end it's up to us to save ourselves :). I rather enjoyed this poem.

[Immortal1967]

i like this...very well written, and deep meaning...good job on it.

[KaySea]

very well done. great job

[Robin]

great poem of dream versus reality , and that big ol' sea we all are adrift upon

[DamienHino]

Delusional, seems to be a dream but your still on a old ghost ship. Interesting, keeps me thinking, you want what you can't have, or maybe your not ready to be saved.

[Jonathan De Elvira]

I love this one...
I can feel it clearly that I'm floating on the middle of ocean after disaster drops on me...
This poem cleverly conjures the feelings...
Really emotionally playing brilliant masterpiece...
I love it....

Please come and save me....:)