Guardian's Lament

Guardian's Lament

A Poem by Forever Mine

Fallen......Angels..... Or.....































the rain hides my tears

the thunder hides my cries

My heart bleeds for you

That is why it storms

The Wings on my back are heavy

The water dripping off of them

The power flickers off and on

in sync with the lightening

The rain is washing the blood away

Washing away the pain....

If all im supposed to do is help

Why do i hurt so many?

My wings shouldnt be mine

They should be yours......

© 2010 Forever Mine

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"The thunder hinds my cries"
I thought about that and it really caught my attention. :)

The whole thing, the whole story, is fantastic! Great write! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago

you put this in the contest??
now 4 sure you're gonna
This one was my fav...I hope you'll win for this write...*thumb up*

Posted 7 Years Ago

I truley love this! Great Job!

Posted 7 Years Ago

The rain hides my tears, the thunder hides my cries - great imagery. Self-searching and sad. and somewhat hopeful as well. Great poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago

I really like this, the way the whole thing flows beautifully.

Posted 7 Years Ago

Excellent poem. I can see why it got a lot of comments. I like the metaphors you used and thought they complimented the sadness well. Picture is great too. Well done Katie.

Posted 7 Years Ago

a fallen angel with a twist , well done

Posted 7 Years Ago

I can't believe how young you are....this is a very wise writing, and yes this picture is perfect for this writing...they compliment each other...great job!

Posted 7 Years Ago

I love this poem, and the picture that you chose is great.

Posted 7 Years Ago

Not sure what to say, that was really gut wrenching... wanting to give everything to help a loved one... it's not just the selfless idea but how you say it... I love the opening...

the rain hides my tears
the thunder hides my cries
My heart bleeds for you
That is why it storms

Posted 7 Years Ago

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Added on September 3, 2010
Last Updated on September 4, 2010


Forever Mine
Forever Mine

Tahlequah, OK

I'm Katie, i'm 18, and a senior in high school. I'm also happily engaged to my bf of two years. I love writing poetry, and i'm currently working on my book "Fall From Time", the prologue is posted rig.. more..

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