The Unseen Hand

The Unseen Hand

A Poem by kdpgrahi
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An attempt to describe a state of confusions.

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Wherever I see, 
Just crowds and crowds,
all around
but not a single man
to find

I am on a mountain top
the sky far far away
billowing clouds surround me
Not a single drop of rain
Hopes are doomed to vain?

I just can not believe 
the river is flowing though
its natural way
An unseen force grips
and brings all to a sway.




© 2011 kdpgrahi



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The first and second stanza describe apparent contradictions that confuse the observer who regains or resolves them by observing the wisdom of a river. If you harmonize the persons in the stanzas from you, I, I, to I, I, I the poem's point of view will be strengthened. Repeating nouns (crowds and crowds, far(?), far) works best to establish a beat or rhythm. Does it work here? I'm a stickler for spelling; its a good obsession for writers.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This felt distinctively existential to me.

Posted 5 Years Ago


this is wonderfully observant

Posted 5 Years Ago


WONDERFUL PIECE I REALLY LIKE THIS NICE JOB HE'S THE KING OF ALL THINGS WE ONLY KNOW THINGS IN PART

Posted 6 Years Ago


Great poem. can not is one word. To me I would consider t his a deep poem, one even I don't understand that well. I need to read is a few times. It's not you or you're poem its me.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I forgot to mention that I really liked the structure and meaning!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The first and second stanza describe apparent contradictions that confuse the observer who regains or resolves them by observing the wisdom of a river. If you harmonize the persons in the stanzas from you, I, I, to I, I, I the poem's point of view will be strengthened. Repeating nouns (crowds and crowds, far(?), far) works best to establish a beat or rhythm. Does it work here? I'm a stickler for spelling; its a good obsession for writers.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

There is always hope ;)
"An unseen force grips and brings all to a sway." I loved that part

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

strong descriptives bring the scenery to vivid~captivating lie~

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You have used such lovely imagery here. Makes for a very nice read. Enjoyed it. Keep on penning.

Posted 6 Years Ago


You make me feel a unison of tranquility and aw. Nice work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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I am over all a down to earth person. I always seek to find the truth. Truth is the elixir of life. My writings are occasional, odd and unorganized. Simply random. more..

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