The Uneasy Partner

The Uneasy Partner

A Poem by kdpgrahi

I just called you
as you like it
never knowing that
you have lost  both the ears
It is unbelievable for me
that you never cared

When the moon turns red
and the sky turns blue
Your face turns  solid rock?
all your promises flee?

I am just an ordinary mortal
never trying to fathom
the mountain how big or tall
How can I know?
At last you throw me into a free fall?

© 2011 kdpgrahi



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interesting - the opening stanza was simple yet profound...

I just called you
as you like it
never knowing that
you have lost both the ears

- this piece represents to me of a lover expecting another to be predictable as they were in the beginning or continue to use the same stimulation for a response through the conditioning.

- this feels to me that this is a fickle lover; while their counterpart is very loyal to serve yet not valued.


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Your wife must adore you! So so funny! I bet you love your life...you "feel" like a happy soul to me through your words....exactly what I needed tonight. Thank you!

Posted 5 Years Ago


This is a very profound poem.

The first stanza says it all!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Short and sweet.

I like the metaphor "you have lost both ears."

I especially like the last stanza.

Posted 6 Years Ago


TASTEFUL NICE RIGHT


Posted 6 Years Ago


This poem is very emotional, but not wordy. I really enjoy everything about this. It's very easy to relate to since I just went through something of this sort, except I was the prick that your person would be writing to. It stings, but all art is supposed to evoke emotion whether it be happiness or guilt. Very well done. The only thing I see that could be changed would be the lack of capitalization on some lines. Otherwise, excellent.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You use such wonderful imagery to get your hearts point across, beautiful! xx

Posted 6 Years Ago


nice work, I felt the distraction and the yearning. It like after all that its still not enough. Cool

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

interesting - the opening stanza was simple yet profound...

I just called you
as you like it
never knowing that
you have lost both the ears

- this piece represents to me of a lover expecting another to be predictable as they were in the beginning or continue to use the same stimulation for a response through the conditioning.

- this feels to me that this is a fickle lover; while their counterpart is very loyal to serve yet not valued.


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow. Very emotional. Well done

Posted 6 Years Ago


Wonderful job on this one. Withdrawal is terrible in a relationship.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 26, 2011
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Tags: Hopelessness, Unfaithfulness

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I am over all a down to earth person. I always seek to find the truth. Truth is the elixir of life. My writings are occasional, odd and unorganized. Simply random. more..

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