The Unfinished

The Unfinished

A Poem by kdpgrahi

So I am forced  to take off my masks, and you yours
our mouths shut? as if we'd been pierced by a glance!

The song of an old Banyan tree is not more full of judgment
It is more surprising how it tries to keep its balance;

so I pull the shadows around me like a puff
and crinkle my eyes as if at the most exquisite moment

of a very long opera, and then we are off!
without reproach and without hope that our delicate feet

will touch the earth again, let alone "very soon."
It is the law of my own voice I shall investigate.



I just start like birds in the sky, ever free to roam about
my thoughts have been restricted
somewhere in the mid-air as if a dead end

The only thing I can command is your whisper
your sweet lips touching mine
the hands clasped in a frenzied mode
to purge oneself from its inert abode


© 2011 kdpgrahi



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I must admit your poetry speaks a volume. No doubt it reflects who you are and what you seek and that is surely truth.
Each stanza of yours has a depth beyond measure.
The third and forth line were beyond my scope of understanding but i shall take a pledge to find for myself what they mean.
Thanks for sharing, sir!

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Nice, I like this here:
"I just start like birds in the sky, ever free to roam about
my thoughts have been restricted
somewhere in the mid-air as if a dead end"

Posted 5 Years Ago


Very nice writing.

Posted 5 Years Ago


It took me from one image to the next; quick, deeply and to the point all the while twining your words into a magnificent silk. Well done!

Posted 5 Years Ago


Beautiful... I felt like it was started with maybe hopelessness or anger and then ended with strength and longing. Nicely done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

So well written--and there are so many lines that are so wonderful--

so I pull the shadows around me like a puff
and crinkle my eyes

Really enjoyed this piece!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a very good poem, a poem I read through more times and enjoyed it more each time, with a lot of hidden meanings.Loved the final couplet.Well done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A wonderfully lyrical write, full of such creative imagery and ideas. Well done indeed!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You are truly someone who has a deep appreciation for life and its hidden intricacies...there is so much that is being communicated here without being obvious. I feel your passion for the unspoken in your verses...beautiful...

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What is lovely about this piece is that it flows superbly! You have such an amount of imagery within this and have made it all fit perfectly together, so warming and beautifully written xoxo

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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I am over all a down to earth person. I always seek to find the truth. Truth is the elixir of life. My writings are occasional, odd and unorganized. Simply random. more..

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