Unfinished....

Unfinished....

A Poem by Kiera Scanlon

When I saw you,
In the coffin,
I thought,
I didn't know you.
It was a shell of you,
Not the real you.

Your body lays at rest now,
It's harder than I thought,
For you,
To be absent from the body,
To be gone.
. . . . . But where?

I know it's not just me you left,
And it leaves a void that cannot be filled,
'cause knowing that you won't be back,
I'm forced to say goodbye.
But don't you worry,
I'll wipe away the tears I can't hide.

© 2014 Kiera Scanlon



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I know it's not just me you left,
And it leaves a void that cannot be filled,
'cause knowing that you won't be back,
I'm forced to say goodbye.
But don't you worry,
I'll wipe away the tears I can't hide.

Very sad but it is natural and destiny. It's touching, and simple. Not an easy subject to write about. You did a
good job here.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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touching...
great job....

Posted 1 Year Ago


This is beautiful and sad, like the rain.
Is it really unfinished, or is that just the title?
Anywho, well done. ^^

Posted 3 Years Ago


Rest is fine... but why do you have a pokeball image assigned to this poem?

Posted 3 Years Ago


If you're really young... really really young .. this is so sweet and nice

Posted 3 Years Ago


Oh wow, this is so sad but really good. You wrote this in a way that touched me so much. I can totally relate to it too. I have lost so many loved ones in my life. I lost my grandfather on my mother's side back in February. It was one of the toughest experiences even if he lived a couple hours away. We had just spoken on the phone a couple days before. He told me that he loved me, that he was proud of my accomplishments, and knew I would go far in life. It seemed so unreal being at the funeral and seeing his body all still and cold.

Your body lays at rest now,

It's harder than I thought,

For you,

To be absent from the body,

To be gone.

. . . . . But where?


^^^^I know where my Papa went and that place would have to be.....Heaven, my dear friend. Awesome write.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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sad, but at the same time fantastic. this was really good i loved it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


To loss someone we love is the hardest part yet the very part of nature. Well expressed!

Posted 3 Years Ago


Very good job my friend. Fox-

Posted 3 Years Ago


I apologize for the late review, but better late then never! I think we can all relate to the feeling of losing someone and people like us, writers, tend to see through the eyes of a realist in situations such as these. I find that we as a writer species question death and all it encompasses quite often, so to see another poem is no surprise. I believe that's why I love this poem so much, it captures the core of us and questions once more in a new way a reality of which most of the human race has not come to terms, well done.

Favorite lines:
"But don't you worry,
I'll wipe away the tears I can't hide."

Posted 3 Years Ago


very strong imagery and strong emotional write !
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Posted 3 Years Ago



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