I-less-than-three-you

I-less-than-three-you

A Poem by Kiera Scanlon

I am the ghost of the person you once knew,
Don't grieve for me,
I wont grieve for you.

I am the ghost of the person you once knew,
Don't Fall for me,
I wont fall for you.

I am the ghost of the person you once knew,
Don't call for me,
I wont call for you.

I am the ghost of the person you once knew,
Don't reach for me,
I wont reach for you.

I am the ghost of the person you once knew,
Don't feel for me,
I wont feel for you.

I am the ghost of the person you once knew,
Don't love for me,
I wont love for you. 

I am the ghost of the person you once knew,
Don't wait for me,
For I have been untrue.


© 2012 Kiera Scanlon



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You had me at the title, which is creative on its own, but takes on earth-shattering significance when applied to the concept that follows it...I also love repetition as a poetic device and you've worked it to perfection here, bringing the reader to a stunning conclusion...awesome piece Kiera, one of my favourites from your collection :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Wonderfully written, didn't expect the ending which is why i think it had such as significant effect. The repetition in the beginning led us towards the end we expected but you steered away from that so well done! :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


The repetition led me towards expecting the twist, but... I still did not see it coming, that beautiful poet is rare, expecting and still being surprised? That’s talent,
Thank-you :)


Posted 3 Years Ago


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the title confused me a little and hats a reason that i actually wanted to read it. i was just looking at the stories and when i saw this one i didn't really know what to think so i decided to give it a chance. I'm glad i gave this story a chance because its really really good.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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4 Months Ago

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Like the title and the poem is one splendid writing. Nice job!

Posted 3 Years Ago


You're writing is enchanting.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Well done as usual. Great job Fox-

Posted 3 Years Ago


Wow, heavy and dark. As other people have said, the ending makes it kind of unexpected. The emotion is raw and sincere, to the point. Very good.

Posted 3 Years Ago


As always, you play well with repetitions. And I like the term "ghost." I really thought you mean something different with that, now I think the speaker is literally a ghost that can not do something back if done with. Oh, I don't know how to explain my point. I like your concept anyway.

Posted 3 Years Ago


I enjoyed the repetitions, and how you kept the rhythm flowing.
The little twist at the end"For I have been untrue" came unexpectedly, and suddenly it al clicked and made such good sense.
I agree with some of the other comments, "wont" should be "won"t, but a cleverly executed piece all in all.


Posted 3 Years Ago


Your endings are killers! Such an unexpected twist. I love the repetition as well

Posted 3 Years Ago



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