Savior

Flying high above the sky

his unseen shadow cast upon their throe 

Swooping down he sought their cry 

and replenished their lanterns with new glow 

Hallowing through the dark rain and thunder

her quavering fire caught his eye afar 

But her light flickered, and why, he wonder

drawing closer he saw her scar 

Courageously she wandered down below 

afraid that others will see it show 

She wrapped a veil around that hid her well

yet the wound bled bleak with each dwell

Puzzled by this torment he landed near

and walked forth to her with wide strides

Frozen she looked at his deific wings in fear

but as her eyes met his, her worry subsides

Slowly up he brought his hand to her heart

taking away the dark and black at last

her light shun once more with dancing art

and she smiled as she once did in past

Up and up he flew now his deed was done 

why, they would ask, her heart he mend 

and he would beg them to give him this one

for each tale deserves a good end

Reviews

[OnceUponATimeWriter]

I like the poem but the rhyme scheme confused me a little. The third paragraph is aabb but the others are abab...i think this should be changed because it brings the reader out of the poem. I like the story though =) it's good and with a bit of work can be a good narrative poem.