Devastated

Devastated

A Poem by Kevin Andros
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This is another song of our band

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Being all alone in the dark
letting my emotions spark
Let go of my miseries
Devastated in the world of dreams

Trapped within the prison of time
But that's not the only cage of mine

Looked through the window, Making a Mindset
Shocked by the view, Setting a mismatch
A solitary bird, singing cheerfully,
Though the backdrop is of the dull, dark sky

Sky is not the limit for me, It's just the mere start of my dreams,
But for you, it's just a place under which they live,

Trapped within the prison of time
But that's not the only cage of mine
Looked through the window, Making a Mindset
Shocked by the view, Setting a mismatch
Sky is not the limit for me, It's just the begining of my dreams,
But for you, it's just a place under which they live,

A flower without a thorn
Rain without the clouds

raging a conflict inside
my heart against my mind
the truth that I said







Watch our live at the reunion of our band:

http://in.youtube.com/watch?v=N8CIvstYMIY


Listen to the original song at:

http://www.riffstar.com/a/The_Novel_Of_Names/Devastated_Valley.html


Watch us Live at the Carnival 2009:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5n3T2qC0kJo&feature=related

© 2009 Kevin Andros



Author's Note

Kevin Andros
This is the lyrics of one of our completed songs. The music for this is a bit different than the rest of our songs.

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This is brilliant!
"Trapped within the prison of time
But that's not the only cage of mine "
Very vivid and such a complexed piece of writing...
I sensed very strong emotions of yours behind it... Somewhere in middle I found as if you are so frustrated that you can't even breathe a second of darkness and shouting for help!
The ending is just marvelous...I personally feel that you should write more poems like this..
Great work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Just as great!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like the repetitions - thay are very good for the song - it sets a pattern, a melody that everybody can follow.
I imagine the music to be punk-rock, but I like imagining the music - just imagining...

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Not bad at all. I like the music. The vocals need a bit of work but aren't too far off. Could be the recording itself as far as that goes. Overall, I'll give it an 8 (out of 10 with 10 being the best).

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

is it fast paced or a bit gothic? it reads well i would like to hear what it sounds like tho'

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i enjoyed the lyrics... great piece of writing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like it. Those last two lines really add a punch to it. Would still like to hear it to get a better feel.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Simply amazing! Absolutely brilliant! This one is going in my favorites!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is brilliant!
"Trapped within the prison of time
But that's not the only cage of mine "
Very vivid and such a complexed piece of writing...
I sensed very strong emotions of yours behind it... Somewhere in middle I found as if you are so frustrated that you can't even breathe a second of darkness and shouting for help!
The ending is just marvelous...I personally feel that you should write more poems like this..
Great work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

You're wrong...the lines are not just good.
In my opinion, they're outstanding.

The meaning is quite complete. It's evident what you're trying to convey but a few lines need a bit of polishing...the 5th and 6th stanzas, to be precise.

I have mostly read stories from you but this is quite a refreshingly different style that you've presented here. You must write more of this.
You must.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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WHAT AM I?: Nephilim
WHAT AM I?: Nephilim
A teen boy gets killed, but trades his soul for another chance. He changes. A girl notices the new boy with silver eyes.

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