hey you2

fun

 

hey you..

oh no...

if you dont know, 

let me tell you! 

 

i was a teenager when

you were still

a baby in its cradle

 

i was an adult

when you used to

suck your mother's n****e

 

i was a man

when you were drinking

your milk in a baby bottle

 

i was a knight

when you were scared

to watch a movie about a battle

 

i was an utterer

when you were

saying "uker" for sugar

 

i was responsible

when you were

still using a diapper

 

and now against me

you come to challenge!

think i would

go into such a battle?

 

it is immoral for a president,

to challenge a little soldier.

 

it is inferior for a lion,

to fight against a humster.

 

it is dishonor for a master,

to insult a beggar

 

throw away your chewing gum

and then go to your mum

your bed time has already gone

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Mockingbird]

sounds like you''re putting a proud ambitious youth in his place. it is done with the dignity of a seasoned gentleman. obviously this boy has no respect for his superiors...perhaps its to avenge his father...it is very funny, nonetheless. it's good to see you writing again.

[Trish D.]

Enjoyed this. Great word choices.

[Miss CB]

Very amusing... Loved the choice of words... Well done!!!

[Lady of the Ring]

funny. easily read and understood. great wording. i really enjoyed this one

[EMMIE]

certain humor to it lol very unique

[Pax]

a nice twist of ending, not like what i expected it to be.
wonderful write.
enjoyed it very much

[GunMetal]

Very cool. The character here is very proud and his years are shown in the power of his words. You present a story for the reader to build around. Excellent work.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed your thoughts in this poem.
"it is immoral for a president,
to challenge a little soldier."
A president need to praise and protect the Soldiers they send to war to kill and died. No weakness in the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Aditi Mahajan]

hey you2..enjoyed this one! unique!

[Katty]

lolziez

[Renée J. Martin]

lol .. and I agree with Mockingbird !