love

love

A Poem by shadow night

love is somthing im missing,

fear is in my heart.

i have nothing to loose,

so i have everything to gain.

if i have no one to love

then who do i have to love me?

i am like every othere human,

i seek my needs out.

i ask my god for what i need,

yet i fear sometimes they dont hear.

i know i sound needy,

i know i ask for a lot.

but when you are like me,

when you have been raised as me,

when you can think like me,

and see like me.

 then i will truely listen to you.

all i ask is for some one to love,

so someone will love me.

thats all i ask for thats all i want,

give this to me and i will ask for no more.

© 2012 shadow night


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In only a few words you spoke one of your hearts deepest and truest desires. That is totally an amazing feat. I could never do that. I'm sure there's a person loves but they might not express it in the most obvious ways we all expect. This was really good. Great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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In only a few words you spoke one of your hearts deepest and truest desires. That is totally an amazing feat. I could never do that. I'm sure there's a person loves but they might not express it in the most obvious ways we all expect. This was really good. Great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

you must have someone that loves you you might not see it though im sure there is someone chin up all will be ok

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This speaks a million words. I feel the same half the time sitting in my room listening to people screaming at 3 in the morning.
I just adore this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

so much hurt for someone so young its sad

Posted 12 Years Ago


i know at the time i was focusing on one thing i could definatly chang it and make it better but at the time i was just so mad i was focused on one thing and thanks for being honest the truth is what i love about the world... but we dont have it and thats the sad thin thank you

Posted 12 Years Ago


hey. this is a review to pay you back for the one you gave me. i'll go and review everything you've written, but i'm just starting at the top of the list.

i didn't really like it. i'm not as good at judging poems, but this one seems to be lacking in a few areas. sorry if it sounds harsh, but i don't like to lie. if i lied, it would only hurt you as a writer. it was like.... each line was repeating the same thing, but never bringing anything new to the table, you know? and it seemed too self centered. pulling off self centered is possible, just not by you at the level you were when you wrote this.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

if you read this pleas review. thank you

Posted 12 Years Ago



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shadow night
shadow night

mansfield, OH



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