My Sparta!

A look at a place and people I've fallen in love with.

Mothers of men roam free among the grasses,

Strike chords within the hearth of male kin,

Attica asks why they rule over strong men,

Bear witness to those that never use sin.

 

Greeks scratch at stone in our honour,

Speak of glory and freedom from corruption,

Pedantry has not now or ever been food,

Strong will and power slack needless abruption.

 

Helen and Gorgo refuse to take the bait,

Leonidas shake hands with enemies nah one,

Cynisca has power that rival the future beauty,

Menelaus our king and god how graves are gone.

 

Sparta the heaven for all warriors and slaves,

A true force of nature and tattered dreams,

Carvings tell of all those pleasant and bloody wars,

How history forgets the telling and secret schemes.

 

 

Author's Note

Honesty!

Reviews

[外人 (Gaiji..]

I missed your poems, sir, with the author's note saying "honesty" ! xD
So, let me be honest, since you asked it:
the first thing that catch my attention is your great knowledge, you've put so many important people's name in the poem ! (I honestly remember only Helen and Menelaus, I've always hated greek mythology xD). Your metrica is outstanding, it is so perfect that I can SEE it, no need to count syllables. Use of quatrains, a classical :). Great pathos, looks pretty much a praise !

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

very entertaining work!

[Owlgirl]

Nice job! Imagery entertwined with emotion, great writing!

[L. Edward Neale]

Indeed. Made it your own. Classy and evocative. Makes me wanna go watch that movie 300. Damn good flick that.

[Belle]

First the title allured me. My Sparta, such a declaration! I love how it is being declared, for I always want to say it aloud as of "My Ithaca".
In all facet I love this piece as I deeply love the Ancient Civilization including the Greek Literature.

Thank you Mr. Fitzgerald for this poem.
Greece must love you, as how I love Robert Fitzgerald translated
the great work of Homer: The ILIAD
I'd like to assume that you two are sharing the same genes.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed I am! x

[Clever Forever]

This is a very smart write. Had to read this one a few times - it's great!

[Amila Jay]

An interesting write :))

[Coyote Poetry]

A great part of myth and history told in the poem. I don't know. Maybe life was more simple 2000 years ago. I like the mystery and story create by the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Lily Mae]

I love this because your great description allowed me image myself there.. seeing, feeling, breathing it all in for myself.. I love the history and the secret schemes..:) x

[MOON]

Lovely write Sparta and all the shenanigans, history alive in your words

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Very good! I like the setting, since we don't come across these kinds of poems so often. The last stanza is my absoulute favorite.