The Offer!

Those times when one must say no!

Bare feet crisp as winter snow on marble,

Men waiting in stone to look upon us few,

Gather thoughts of sins committed before now,

Once forgiven you go forth and apply now new.

 

He comes for her and you at darkened eve,

Never known yet recognised by us on sight,

Black clothes leave tales unspoken or thought,

Never kneel you faithful for weapons he uses fright.

 

Command no sing no and say no as always,

Remember it is not his to convey or see,

People walk in blood and in bodies of food,

Were weak at our level and protected agree.

 

Goodbye strangers of goblins and monsters,

Your power is clear and strong and destroyed,

Merely pray my darlings and all are answered,

I tell you be free and forgive all never avoid.

 

Author's Note

Honestly is what we love.

Reviews

[David Scott]

We...? are you many in there? hmmm.
Ok honesty. I got bits and pieces of thoughts and chips falling off emotions as if grated cheese from a solid block to flavor a salad. Yes, a salad I think.
Parts of the poem stumbled off and tripped my thinking. So, I sort of hopped along the solid rocks in the write to get to the other side. Looking back, I desired either to wade into the waters or have a solid path.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Well thank you David!

[Kaylie]

this is absolutely beautiful. I like the style, and think you have a wonderful word choice, that goes for some of your other pieces also!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Kaylie

[Relic]

Command no. That's a challenge sometimes but without that command his recognition might as well go unnoticed. A good poem Thomas.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Relic.

[Relic]

You're welcome Thomas.

[Mike Cole]

"Honestly is what we love." I can completely agree but I think sometimes it is not what we want to hear we love the truth but are sometimes afraid of what it may bring

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed Mike, thank you x

[Inspiring Writer]

Nice penned and i liked your Author's Note too "Honesty's what we do love" that's a great way to defined something in short. Nice flow of ink.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you love x

[shallimarRose]

"Merely pray my darlings and all are answered,
I tell you be free and forgive all never avoid."
Thought provoking write.. shallimarRose

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you x

[SyberRose]

I'm having poignant anxiety about now ha...well crafted and a thought provoking piece Thomas as always:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Rose.

[Sami Khalil]

The critical answer of no is so important to fend off so many things and cut to the chase of the game or evil. It asserts our will in the matters of things and shows we are free human beings...All well said and spoken...:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Sami - p.s. the new photo is fabulous! x

[Sami Khalil]

Thank you muchly...:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there are many ways the devil comes and tempts us...'

walking away is the best thing...the absolute "no"!

this is the only way we are really free.

love the way you presented this.

jacob

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Jacob.

[Jack...]

It is definitely better to say "no" than, "I'll think about it." Because you may very well not think about it, but they will. Very cool Thomas.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Jack.