Beautiful Brutality!

The moment in Spartan upbringing.

Born to sour temperament and political policy,

Weakness gleamed in tremor's slight,

To pale to be of Grecian ilk,

Thank Gods no country side in sight.

Now seven years the barracks beckons,

My Mother's pride sent to the stake,

Twenty three years for the pain in me,

No time for us soldiers to be fake.

Wonders of becoming that horrid equal,

A wife to take but no house to live,

Those whips a dear and cutting friend,

No muscle ever the chance to give.

Now thirty years we slot in perfectly,

So time again now doubled in blue robe,

Strong through beatings beautiful brutality,

We never Athenian but of Spartan abode.

Author's Note

Coming back to my roots.

Reviews

[Dayran]

Each of us rises to the occasion when confronted with the tests brought by life. We never know what we are capable of until we do. But one minute of facing life's realities is sometimes equal to a lifetime of running away in dreams. A poem about the strength of character in trials.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed than you.

[wordman]

i think we all probably experience lifes trials,most end up in tribulation
powerful write

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[wordman]

you`re welcome

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Thank You for Dropping this on POES|A, your work is now selected for publication on June 2020 issue of POES|A literary magazine.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

A very strong work indeed this was amazing on every level

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

Your welcome Thomas, I loved the title it caught my eye right away and the poem was just brilliant

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful words and thoughts.
"Now seven years the barracks beckons,
My Mother's pride sent to the stake,
Twenty three years for the pain in me,
No time for us soldiers to be fake."
You gave enough to create thoughts and vision. Warriors know blood and need love. Thank you dear friend for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[TL Boehm]

Ah yes, Spartan life might be a hard thing for some to grasp - I found the poem powerful. Perhaps it is the resonance in my Viking DNA. Also warriors.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

as in mine, thank you.

[Mac]

"Strong through beatings brutality" I became memorized after the first three words and let my breath go at the second to last line. Your writing reminds me of learning about the Romantics in my poetry courses in college. Thank you for this order of words. It is what I like about writing.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

I guess we are all fighters for survival and existence midst adversities...Excellent Thomas...Pen on

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...:)....

[Saddam]

Coming from beginning and it ends well.
Excellent piece.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[Saddam]

Most welcome friend...

[Poetic Beauty]

I really liked that last stanza and it brings the whole piece together.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.