Society's W***e.

For anyone that has been a victim of rape, I am your brother and I will no longer whimper in the corner, be strong my darlings and live!

Blisters dance across ones skin in delight,

Heavy limbs lay flat on cold concrete,

Open wounds seep pus and fear in equal measure,

Scratch's bind broken nails in mere defeat.

Failed meetings never cease to amaze the victim,

Sex a horrid tool of power and dominance with men,

Tremble and excite those locked doors in your mind,

Pleasant does not seem to sooth or excite the pen.

No strengths can help you or divide the thoughts,

Taken innocence is not the issue, taken time is,

They win in that moment they certainly do,

Murder however is revenge and sweet in hands that wiz.

Fallen pillars of the community exposed to all,

Make no mistake they beat and cut us to out core,

As they lay sunken in coffins lined with led,

Tell yourself this, you're no longer society's w***e.

Author's Note

Your honesty and heart are needed here.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

powerful lines ..no doubt ..your strong feelings come across loud and clear ... your comment about rape and your poem together throw me a little ..seems your poem is more metaphor on certain ills of society .. your last two verses seem particularly expressive of your angst ...second line second verse .. i think i would end it after ".....dominance ..." when you add "men" in there it takes away from the horror of rapists whether they are literal or those in power that rape in a more subtle way ... i love this line:
"Scratch's bind broken nails in mere defeat." ..one fights and is helpless with the only weapons at hand ..fingernails .. becoming a testimony to the helplessness ... i think that is such a fine line ..and i like the word play using ol' Scratch very appropriately ..
E.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you EN, the literal does creep in with this piece I'm afraid however plays it's part well, thank you.

[Draven]

If I were to pinpoint everything I like about this I would be here all day. It was a good topic, bold to say the least. You did very well, and went out with a bang. Perfect title that hits you in the face. I can think of nothing anyone could possibly find wrong with this piece of inspiring poetry.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Draven.

[Uche Paul]

You made an effort here. Good endeavor. However, are women the only victim of this societal ill, and men alone the perpetrators?

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed not, as I wrote this from a man's perspective I am uniquely qualified to say that!

[Ruth]

Damn, this is such a deep flow of raw emotion and meaning. Horrible to think on sex being a power tool. Sigh...well articulated hon :)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed thank you.

[William Liston]

Yes. My heart goes out to anyone who has ever been a victim of rape. 'Society's W***e' was a great title for this, and it fits very well in the last line. Well done.

-William Liston

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you William, I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Coyote Poetry]

Here in Michigan. Rape victims get abuse by the police department. Like they were the victim.
"Fallen pillars of the community exposed to all,
Make no mistake they beat and cut us to out core,
As they lay sunken in coffins lined with led,
Tell yourself this, you're no longer society's w***e."
The above lines. Strong and honest. This poetry need to be read by more people. Thank you my friend for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed it happens all over the world, thank you.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[dillonjensen]

An important message lies in this poem. I hope to write as well as you do one day, sir. Thank you for sharing.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Very kind thank you.

[Shabeeh Haider]

A powerful write on a very distressing topic. The ending is a strong retaliation.
You have written a wonderful poem.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[Pryde Foltz]

A poem that definitely packs a punch. Your pen is so good, Thomas. A powerful regaining of personal power:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[Lyn Anderson]

a strong and heavy voice for a strong subject. I am not sure if sooth is an intended play on words as well as led, as both could be, other than that your should be you're. Your powerful, defiant tone empowers, which I believe the intention to be. Standing for victims. Men is too nice a descriptor for rapists. They are a different species.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed, a play on word's for sure, thank you for the edit, it's taken me quite a while to write this piece, so perfection is needed, thank you my darling.

[Lyn Anderson]

It is a wonderful piece I can appreciate, having been in a couple relationships where what was mine was taken from me without permission.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

There certainly are times when one can speak out without fear of retaliation, in hope anyway, thank you KL.