Will.

Will.

A Poem by Thomas Fitzgerald
"

My thoughts from the grave side.

"
There is that unwilling smile crafted to perfection,
They mean well of course but time and place,
No meaning as the sun touches the torn earth,
This space will forever be marked now the case.

The mind drifts you see to sentiment and memory,
Never far but enough to guide in happiness,
Marred by death and an unwilling spirit that's you,
Oh safe no more plausible than is greatness.

Rings bound us in faith and love made a prison,
For which escape had no essence in life times still,
That smile again as those mourners stare on,
Will forever be a down fall my dear sweet Will.

Gone to a better place, I very much doubt it,
There is no better place than by my side,
Emotions ebb and flow they tell me such knowledge!
Can leave as you have left gone and died.

© 2016 Thomas Fitzgerald



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Author's Note

Thomas Fitzgerald
Honesty and time!

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Solid, honest and powerful words my friend.
"Gone to a better place, I very much doubt it,
There is no better place than by my side,
Emotions ebb and flow they tell me such knowledge!"
The lines above. I believe are true. You left the reader with something to think about. Thank you Thomas for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Thomas Fitzgerald

1 Year Ago

Thank you C.P. this was a tough one to write.
Coyote Poetry

1 Year Ago

Was a worthwhile poem and you are welcome.



Reviews

i am sorry for the loss you have suffered ... :( V1 makes me think of sculptors and painters placing that smile just so ... cementing it in their own perfections ...
syntax and editing confuses me in places .. for instance, capitalizing each line at the beginning and commas at the ends ...and phrasing like, "This space will forever be marked now the case." ..the theme is devastating and powerful ...i am glad that "onlookers" are at least given a "..mean well of course.." instead of completely phony ..
the honesty of your closing is poignant ..and leaves me silent and empathizing ... must have been difficult to write this one Thomas .. very sad!
E.
ps. i need to return tomorrow and read again ...sometimes my mind is in a place that keeps me from reading properly ..and waiting a day can make things much more clear to me ;)


Posted 4 Months Ago


The poem weaves a story in the poet's mind. Very beautifully crafted. The end especially was great

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Thomas Fitzgerald

5 Months Ago

Thank you.
love made a prison......i think, thats the heart of this piece....
excellent!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Thomas Fitzgerald

10 Months Ago

Thank you.
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Damn...this is really strong emotion. Your words have fingers that grab the reader to this place in you leaving them touched for sure. Excellent!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Thomas Fitzgerald

1 Year Ago

Thank you.
Well penned!
I could definitely feel the emotions in your loss,
I can relate:(
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Thomas Fitzgerald

1 Year Ago

Thank you.
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B.J
Your sentiment, reflects the honesty of feelings that develope through life. So many lines created with powerful meaning.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Thomas Fitzgerald

1 Year Ago

Thank you.
B.J

1 Year Ago

:)>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>
"Rings bound us in faith and love made a prison"...such a powerful line, the flow of writing is so well and amazing...enjoyed reading it

Posted 1 Year Ago


Thomas Fitzgerald

1 Year Ago

Thank you.
ah raw and pure, the words come with great meaning and sadness. Great job

Posted 1 Year Ago


Thomas Fitzgerald

1 Year Ago

Thank you Lola
This is so heartfelt and tangible Thomas, really paused me and my thoughts, I read twice and each time stalled me, motionless, superb :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Thomas Fitzgerald

1 Year Ago

Thank you Poppy.
Man, just wow. The feelings you are able to elicit in the reader is such a talent. You write very well, and it shows. The second to last stanza sticks out the most to me. It's very deep when thought is put forth into it. Bravo.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Thomas Fitzgerald

1 Year Ago

thank you.

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Added on August 10, 2016
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Thomas Fitzgerald
Thomas Fitzgerald

Wexford, Leinster, Ireland



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