Will.

My thoughts from the grave side.

There is that unwilling smile crafted to perfection,

They mean well of course but time and place,

No meaning as the sun touches the torn earth,

This space will forever be marked now the case.

The mind drifts you see to sentiment and memory,

Never far but enough to guide in happiness,

Marred by death and an unwilling spirit that's you,

Oh safe no more plausible than is greatness.

Rings bound us in faith and love made a prison,

For which escape had no essence in life times still,

That smile again as those mourners stare on,

Will forever be a down fall my dear sweet Will.

Gone to a better place, I very much doubt it,

There is no better place than by my side,

Emotions ebb and flow they tell me such knowledge!

Can leave as you have left gone and died.

Author's Note

Honesty and time!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Solid, honest and powerful words my friend.
"Gone to a better place, I very much doubt it,
There is no better place than by my side,
Emotions ebb and flow they tell me such knowledge!"
The lines above. I believe are true. You left the reader with something to think about. Thank you Thomas for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you C.P. this was a tough one to write.

[Coyote Poetry]

Was a worthwhile poem and you are welcome.

[Alice Poésy]

This sounds like something Edgar Allen Poe could have written -- and of course this is a huge compliment. It tackles such a dwelling, universal topic and you've dealt with it beautifully.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Alice.

[Pushkar Prabhat]

WoW!!!
strong, sad yet confident words..........
"
Gone to a better place, I very much doubt it,
There is no better place than by my side, "

i just loved this line............brilliant!!!

great work!!!
i loved it!!!
:)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[wordman]

makes you wonder,i hope it`s a better place

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed thank you.

[Valentine]

Your wording is really mind grabbing in this write. Valentine

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Valentine.

[Sarah]

Sad poem about dealing with death. I can feel the satire when you say "Gone to a better place, I very much doubt it." You never really know what happens after death, and unfortunately that's the way it is. I also liked the incorporation of the smiles. "They mean well of course." True tale of condolences, yet it hardly means a thing. Good poem!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you Sarah

[Baby Ricochet]

Sad poem. I don't think you go anywhere when you die either. You just don't exist anymore. Like before you were born.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed, thank you BR

[Ted Kniffen]

A well written commentary on loss. We know 'They mean well of course' but that's not always enough. But then, it is often awkward for them to salve the wound. Good writing.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you TK

[Sami Khalil]

A very touching write that represents loss and grief. May the grave be a resting place for the soul till judgement day...:)..............

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you SK

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome TF.....》》》》》》

[Ana Papaya]

I lost someone once. Someone very precious.
People said all the standard things:

She's in a better place.
God needed an angel.
God this... God that...
She's at peace...

Honestly, it was really annoying and made me angry.
I just needed to be held and to cry. And cry. But no one offered that.
Just empty words.

Anyhow. You're poem is lovely. I think it describes very well these thoughts from beside the grave...

A very very powerful write. I'm glad I stopped to read this.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you PAPAYA

[Ana Papaya]

You're welcome Thomas. I wish I could offer some better comfort.
Have a nice weekend.

[Bacchus]

rings that made a prison-
that death doesn't us part...
doesn't separate immediately

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Indeed thank you.