A life time in a kiss

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The day began with a smile and ended with a bloody mess. I, Janet Dennis  have seen murder.

        When I woke up I smiled and thought it would be a good day. My parents were jolly and keep running their mouths. I went to my best friends house, Willy Edhard. Me and him did the usual, video games and homework. But today, he kissed me and my heart filled with happiness. When i went home after that, as I crossed the street a car raced down the ricked road and hit me and as I hit the concrete face first, all I thought of was my last and first kiss, with the one who fills me with happiness. Thinking of happy thoughts makes death a lot less sad. Every second that passed before my mom ran out my house was like a year of pain and hell. I heard the paramedics and police talking and asking people questions about what happened. One minute I'm listening and the next I'm opening my eyes. "Dan! Shes awake!" Janet's mom cried to her boyfriend. "Janet? It's mama." Janet was so confused. All she remembered was kissing Willy, nothing seemed real, not even the kiss."Doctor! The patient is up." Janet looked around the room. Every thing is so blurry. Then, she faded again. When she woke up for good, her mother told her what happened.

"Honey, you were dead for 3 minutes. you were hit by a drunk driver." Her mother handed her a mirrior.I had all kinds or scratches and stiches. My nose was dislocated and my left eye woudnt open. All this, just because of a kiss.

     Willy came to see me today and he kissed me again but he didn't seem right. then he pulled a gun out and said his last words to me "I can't stand to see you like this. I'll put you out of your missery.'' And people rushed in and arested him. My whole life, in one kiss.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting story. I did like the memory of a kiss. A nice way to go if we had to. A good story with a very good storyline. A excellent tale.
Coyote

[Hachamecha]

oh, registeredisaster.... You are such a clown. So straight forward. He needs to understand that not everybody sees the world like he does. Read his review in a joking manner. He just... Sigh. I need to beat him with my sandwich during lunch tomorrow...
Nice write:)

[Sarah Hime (PokemonFan#..]

I'm very much opposed with registeredisaster. He/ does not have the right feeling for your writing. It was a sad and beautiful write. Please keep it up!

[Marjory]

Your story left me hanging. Although it's too short and the emotions by the protagonist seem to have inconsistency, the ending you have written is quite catchy. I suggest you described what happened in your story in an organized way or maybe put yourself in the shoes of the protagonist to enhance your creativity. Keep writing!

[registeredisaster]

that was very interesting. that so WRONG!!!! what the hell kind of s**t are you writing?! you are incredibly MESSED UP!!! go get a boyfriend, live a normal life, have kids and just stop being so FUCKED UP!! have a nice-F*****G-day.

[smarie]

I love it too! But I'm not going to lie this was kinda cruel haha especially the last part. The pace of the story was impressive.

[Bridget Murphy]

Wow, this is an amazing story, it catches you from the first line!!!!:)

[∂αʌ<..]

ow! :O

too cruel the last bit! lol...but nice abrupt writing...i like the fast pace! :)

[Kit Cat]

the dude was crazy!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i hope he dies......... and then i eat him

[MetBySunlight]

:O why would he do that?