Empty Pockets

This is suppose to be funny. Its about how I spend all my money on junk food then left with crap.

Tear me like plastic, break me like glass,

Take what you must because I'm all out of cash.

 

Nothing is left, not even a thought,

Memories begin to haunt me of the things that I bought.

 

There once was a time when I actually had bills,

When I went to McDonald's and bought simple meals.

 

I had bills, quarters, and sometimes even dimes,

Now when  I'm hungry I just use what I find.

 

I know I'm more fortunate than most people in town,

But that old saying is true; that money makes the world go round.

Reviews

[Melody]

I love it! You are like a rhyming master! It's sort of funny, I think you got the point through. Lol.
I afree with Marble Mountain though, I think in the last line you should take out the second "that".

[Becky]

This amused me greatly. :)

The only thing I noticed was that the last line seemed to be rather wordy. Maybe take out the second "that"? It could just be me.

Other than that, nicely written!

[Barbara Walker]

This is cute and humorous!

[Celestial Witch Child]

Hahaha- nice. I think we all know the feeling. :3