i see you

i see you

A Poem by Cereal Killer
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wrote this for a special some one going through a lot

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In the midst of the crowd i see you
A needle in the haystack, actually a pin
it seems like the walls are closing in, been there
Trying to seek validation just to fit in, done that too.

I see the desperation behind your posts
The silent cries hidden behind that goofy smile
Behind those nude pics,i can feel the self hate
I can't judge, i don't know what you have been through.

Behind those likes and comments, you loath yourself
It's all a pattern now, exposing your self for validation
The feeling doesn't last long enough, it's like a drug
We all need that 5 min trip to cloud 9 but it's not enough.

I want to let you know that i see you
The pain, the loneliness, disgust and the self loathing
We are just match sticks trapped in the same box
desperately waiting for someone to set us free.

You might not notice it but just know i feel the pain too!!!

© 2017 Cereal Killer



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There is much merit in these words & you have done a fine job of graphically describing the scene being played out....mixed with a fair amount of empathy & concern..... I thoroughly enjoyed my visit ....... Neville

Posted 1 Month Ago


After receiving your friend request, I check to see you've only got one thing posted. Many new writers on this website do not continue & that's why I don't accept friend requests when a person hasn't yet gotten fully into the experience of posting stuff here.

With that said, your poem is quite brilliant in the way you've captured the specific clues that are noticeable by only the observant & caring, seeing a friend thru astute & understanding eyes -- something this fast-paced digital world could use much more of. I hope you'll be posting more soon! Your point of view is very relatable & honest.

Posted 11 Months Ago


The poem leads right to the "match sticks", and from what I read, it's not freedom she, or you, needs, it's the explosion. Well done, and I'm looking forward to more love letters to this mysterious damsel in such dreadful distress....

Posted 1 Year Ago


I'm aware of someone here who may be the recipient of your poem. I would imagine there is pain involved in the choice to do those things so I can understand your point of view. Whether she does...who knows.

Nice job and welcome to the site.

Posted 1 Year Ago



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Added on June 24, 2017
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Cereal Killer
Cereal Killer

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An old school pen and paper writer, mostly inspired by reality,dreams and imagination. I welcome reviews, suggestions,recommendations and productive criticism as it is part of improving the quality .. more..

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