Take My Hand

Take my hand

and come with me

There's somewhere else I'd rather be.

 

A different time

a different day

Somewhere very far away.

 

Come! You'll find

you have no cares

There are no fears or worries there.

 

No troubled thoughts

to plague your mind

Or broken hearts to try to bind.

 

If you would, please

come along

Give a shout or sing a song

 

For our destination

knows no woe

So take my hand and off we'll go!

Author's Note

Correct, criticize, advise! Tell me what you think! :D

Reviews

[Mary Ochoa]

Nicely written! Off to great adventures. Thank you for sharing.

[Brittany Zedalis]

Sounds like a great destination to have. Great job writing this.

[Stephen]

It's well penned, I really don't think, there's any error or this write should be criticized by anyone. I love this poem because it's based on love and in today's life everyone love reading and writing poems or stuffs on love because it gives 'em relief and brings some smile on their faces making sin. Here I find much love in your words which are came from the depth of your heart letting the reader know how beautiful a heart you've got. Nicely done, well designed and the usage of words's perfectly suited over the whole poem.

Keep up the great work!

[A. Amos]

One of the coolest I read on this site, pure, raw, honest and straight from your heart and that is how as your reader I read and enjoyed; such a lively poem. Will be back to read more of your work....

[Kaitlyn]

Thank you very much!

I'm glad that you enjoyed it. (it was a really fun one to wright)

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome

[twain]

Nothing to correct here, its short, simple and beautiful. I felt that in such few words you were able to capture a lot. I've read long poems that do not capture as much as your's. Keep writing!

[Kaitlyn]

:)
Thank you.

I'm glad that you enjoyed it.

[Sourav]

Simple. nice and rhythmic! Nice one.

[Kaitlyn]

Thank you :)

I'm really glad that you liked it!

[Relic]

I like this not only for it almost uplifting spiritual quality but because when it comes to interpretation, this could also be though of as sinister! It's well written with good rhymes. I like it. Good writing.

[Kaitlyn]

:) I'd never thought of it that way, but you're right!

I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review :)

[Relic]

Welcome.

[junaid altaf]

so take my hand!
the fingers even do seperate!
but a fist is a mystery united
and moreover life is all about being excited!
well composed!

[Deepankar]

Very impressive..... The Thought of being in a paradise sort of place with no worries... is very intriguing..... Gr8 write

[Kaitlyn]

:D
Thank you, I'm glad that you enjoyed it!

[Distant horizons]

Okay, let's go :-)
Sometimes, all we need is a helping and protecting hand. Beautifully penned.

[Kaitlyn]

Isn't that the truth!

Thank you, I'm really glad that you enjoyed it. :D

[Distant horizons]

:-)