Drunk in the Bathtub

Drunk in the Bathtub

A Poem by kayla

I'm drunk in the bathtub,

somehow yet again;

drunk in the bathtub

with not even one friend.

 

The party is finally over

and everybody has left;

except for my drunk a*s

naked up to my chest.

 

I'm drunk in the bathtub,

I knew I should have stopped;

I know I should have ended it

after the sixth shot.

 

Now I'm in the same spot,

drunk and alone yet again;

this bottle of Whiskey

once again my only friend.

© 2012 kayla


Author's Note

kayla
Tell me what you think. I got the idea of it from the photo at the top.

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This was sad and cute at the same time. We know better and yet we persist with the same behaviors.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Love the title.
And the sense of humor.

It seems like you just tapped the surface though. If you plan on revising, spend some time looking at the picture again.
Try to add in subtle cues as to why she keeps ending up in the same spot.

Look forward to reading more from you.

Posted 11 Years Ago


i love it

Posted 11 Years Ago


I'm glad I read all of the comments before writing this. It's good. Now, try this when you have a moment... put on a blindfold and try to imagine what your life would be like from that moment forward if you could never, ever take it off.

Posted 11 Years Ago


haha that was pretty funny and pretty good.... nice job

Posted 11 Years Ago


LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT!!!! I'm drunk in a bathtub right now!

Posted 11 Years Ago


I cannot understand why this makes me snicker. Nonetheless, you've humored me with this poem. Good job.

Posted 11 Years Ago


your not doing bad kid keep at it you will get it try to think of metaphors and more complex imagery

Posted 11 Years Ago


I love this poem. I'm glad its not inspired by ur real life :D. Wow that's pretty amazing that u can write a great poem just from looking at a pic and u told a intruguing story :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


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kayla

11 Years Ago

thanks(: lately I can't write a poem unless I have a photo prompt

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Added on August 1, 2012
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Tags: humor, poem, poetry, alcohol

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kayla
kayla

Los Angeles, CA



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Becoming active on this site again! Originally started my account as teenager, but am a young woman now with hopefully still just as much to say. I write mostly poetry (but occasionally short stori.. more..

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