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Lovestruck Daydreamer

Lovestruck Daydreamer

A Poem by kayla

I listen to your music
and it takes me to another place
where I'm lying in your arms,
your chest rising against my face.

I day dream of future days
when I'm finally with you,
days when I can see you often
and not for an hour or two.

I imagine walking Venice,
hand-in-hand, down the beach,
your arms around my waist
knowing you'll protect me.

I wish for endless days
when I can just lie and be.
Surround myself with your love
and swim in your seas.

I conjure up amazing images
of you and I traveling the world.
Just my amazing man
and his lucky little girl.

This list could go on forever,
the things I wish for and see,
but then I open my eyes
and in my room it's only me.

© 2012 kayla


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Very sweet :) beautifully written!

Posted 11 Years Ago


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I really liked this and I liked how I could relate to it. And, I'm sure lots of other people could relate to it also

Posted 11 Years Ago


Those good dreams may not come true. But they are set-up for the real one's when they appear. I like the desire and dreams in the poem. Was a sad ending. As long as we have hope and chance. Life can be okay. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
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Posted 11 Years Ago


I could feel your nostalgia, but the thing is that I feel it could be improved if you maintained your lines.

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is pretty solid. I don't normally criticize syllable counts, but I feel like the ebb and flow you are presenting here would have more impact with more consistent meter. Aside from that, I definitely felt the splash in the final stanza, as anyone who's had a long-distance relationship would.

Posted 11 Years Ago


What a dream! The dreams that are vivid can take you to surreal places where you never want to leave. Nice work!

Posted 11 Years Ago


I loved this poem! It's very well written and it has a great rhythm.
Excellent job!
100/100

Posted 11 Years Ago


awwww so cute .....well done

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Added on August 9, 2012
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Tags: poem, poetry, love, romance, LDR

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kayla
kayla

Los Angeles, CA



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Becoming active on this site again! Originally started my account as teenager, but am a young woman now with hopefully still just as much to say. I write mostly poetry (but occasionally short stori.. more..

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