Understanding.

Finally a new piece from me. As in, one that I've written just now, rather than some time back. Analogical.

Surrounded by none but a destructive disaster, 

most would fear for their life.

I sit calmly, in my spot of serenity.

Here I live, in the eye of the storm.

Reviews

[junXion]

Firstly, i admire the fact that you at such young age are already writing poems, never stop what you're doing. But, a review wouldn't be a good review without some proper contructive feedback. So, I find the idea of an art-nouveau like description of natural phenomena very brave, It's a hard thing to do. And with that considered I find the poem too literal, its more a description than a poem at best. One thing I, personally, wouldn't do is naming the poem the same as the last line uses as an apoptosis, especially if the poem is this short. Furthermore if your want to use the jugendstil kind of poem you want to use more adjectives. Maybe even use some adjectives that appear in nature itself to give your poem even more strength. I hope you can use this review for improvement. Sincerely yours, Jules.

[Vaporvision]

I kind of just spat this out, but I'll make some slight edits and see how it turns out. Thanks.

[Vaporvision]

Here we are. I've changed it around a wee bit. How's this?

[junXion]

Yes! Far better, don't you think so too? Keep improving and writing my friend! Sincerely yours, Jules.

[Vaporvision]

Indeed. It now feels more smooth and gentle, as how I intended it to be. Mostly based on the analogy. Thanks :)

[Tazeen Ahmed]

a very intense poem depicting your calmness over disastrous situations...
well penned!

[Vaporvision]

Thank you very much :) Despite the review being short, I couldn't ask for one that felt better.

[JerryB]

Eh . . . That then is the test. A test to seek the inner you and to believe and understand what you have found. There is nothing better than to know oneself especially in the midst of chaos. Not one thing can match that feeling, even the sentiment called love. Loved this short, direct poem from the soul of one who understands what it means to live without fear. . .

[Vaporvision]

Thank you very much, Jerry. This review is poetic enough to be an entry of it's own.

[JerryB]

Awww . . . Thanks . . .

[DoormanDan]

As I was reading this, I pictured one of those badass, farmer characters that you see in some action films just sitting out on their porch, in a rocking chair, with a shotgun in their lap, nonchalantly watching and waiting as a myriad of enemies comes barreling his/her way. Anyway, nicely written. I enjoyed your usage of alliteration, how concise the piece is, and your general message. I would hope that I would have that kind of courage in a chaotic situation! :)

[Vaporvision]

Haha, not exactly what I was going for, but I'm very glad I created an image. Now that I think about it, I laugh at the thought as well. Thank you very much for the kind review :)

[DoormanDan]

You're welcome. Thank you for posting this piece! By the way, I notice that your About section says you're an aspiring English teacher. Same here!

[Vaporvision]

Nice. Hopefully you continue to follow the path you're on, and achieve your goal. Luck to you, my friend. :)

[DoormanDan]

Thanks, same to you! :)