Expert Heartbreaker

Yupp, a song.

You seem to be an expert at breaking hearts

Don't know where to go, or where to start

I wanna be with you

Scattered the pieces and search the ocean blue

 

I spent all my months trying to be with you

And yes, there were stuff that I would never do

Secret words and past regrets, wouldn't lead me anywhere to gain myself respect

I tried to get some confidence to finally ask you out

And without you here, you're all I think about

 

You seem to be an expert at breaking hearts

Don't know where to go, or where to start

I wanna be with you

Scattered the pieces and search the ocean blue

You seem to be the expert at dropping hearts

I scribbled your name and tore it all apart

I want you to be around

You left me here and now I'm westbound

 

I wasted half my life, trying to ask you.

Yes, I lent an ear, the one to whisper to

"What's your secret?" and "I don't cares." Every little thing always got me nowhere.

I tried to gain some confidence to finally ask you out.

Now you took him, you're still all I dream about

 

You seem to be an expert at breaking hearts

Don't know where to go, or where to start I wanna be with you

Scattered the pieces and search the ocean blue

You seem to be the expert at dropping hearts

I scribbled your name and tore it all apart

I want you to be around

You left me here and now I'm westbound

Reviews

[Tenten]

this express my heart so hardcore it makes me sad because i've yet to able to do it, ask that person out, great song, its an awesome flow.

[distefano 401]

i'd love to hear this as a song. i love the line "scribbled your name and tore it...", that was a good image. you have some really good writing, keep it up

[TL Boehm]

great meter and catchy hook lines in this piece. I would love to hear this one set to music. It already has its own rythm. Well done.

[Cold Coffee Magazine]

Theres nothing more sad than love unreturned. Great write. Keep them coming.

Dave

[Martin L.]

Very good song. Sad when the girl you like goes with another man.

[Heaven]

Very nice. It flows pretty well. It gets the emotion through too! I like it. It would be cool if this did turn out to be a song that played on the radio because I think a lot of people would like it!!!! Self doubt always seems to be a persons greates weakness... And indecision just feeds off from that... But good poem!!!!! =)

[ah]

i really like this, it shows very well how badly her choosing another guy is for you, keep it up, nice write