To tame the untameable...an interesting idea. I like the juxtaposition in this one. You used a lot of fire imagery, which always gets to me, because I think fire is extremely beautiful and powerful in terms of writing--it can both give life and take it in one swoop. Well written.
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Thanks! I too like fire when it comes to imagery, its just so passionate and raw with its need for .. read moreThanks! I too like fire when it comes to imagery, its just so passionate and raw with its need for respect and its desire to consume.
To tame the untameable...an interesting idea. I like the juxtaposition in this one. You used a lot of fire imagery, which always gets to me, because I think fire is extremely beautiful and powerful in terms of writing--it can both give life and take it in one swoop. Well written.
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Thanks! I too like fire when it comes to imagery, its just so passionate and raw with its need for .. read moreThanks! I too like fire when it comes to imagery, its just so passionate and raw with its need for respect and its desire to consume.
Of an unbridled spirit that can never be tamed."
You are on a great roll with lots of great writes and this one is no exception. Well penned and said...Thank you for sharing...:)
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Thank you. I went on hiatus for a while after having two surgeries. It feels really good to be get.. read moreThank you. I went on hiatus for a while after having two surgeries. It feels really good to be getting back in the groove :)
Interesting assessment...dangerous, provocative...alluring and oh so dark...speaks to my dark side l.. read moreInteresting assessment...dangerous, provocative...alluring and oh so dark...speaks to my dark side like a truth. Have to love the dual nature in us all.
Ah that heat is always what motivates us isn't it? Who needs tame, lukewarm is overrated, and this is a spirited read my friend...warmed up my dreary, damp day. Much enjoyed.
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Thank you Frienda :)
When I wrote it in 2006, I was focused on telling the person I w.. read moreThank you Frienda :)
When I wrote it in 2006, I was focused on telling the person I was dating at the time that he would never be able to break my spirit. If death, tragedy, and emmense loss couldn't do it, his demeaning comments, violent outbursts and full on assults weren't going to either.
Hearts weren't meant to be tamed, the were meant to be joined. LOL. Guess that's why that particular boy is in my past and his ghost is now just ink from my pen.
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Good on you, the best thing you can do to men as such is INK them ;-) My pleasure always Kristin.
Along side of the spirit that can not be changed excitedly stands a spirit of understanding, no shadows, only light. Very nice
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Thanks Jack :) The human spirit is more resilient than we think. It's when we are tested time and .. read moreThanks Jack :) The human spirit is more resilient than we think. It's when we are tested time and time again that we find out just how limitless that inner passion/desire is.
I enjoyed the spirit of this, but I found the 3rd line to be problematic, as the visual just didnt work for me....also, the rhyme at the end of the 5th seems out of place. Finally,, rages deep within my soul is a line that could use reworking....it's an oft overused line and, from reading your other work, I know you've got far more creativity in you.
None of my critiques come from a negative place, so I hope I this is not taken as such. Keep the spirit of this, but it could use some tweaks. Hopefully this doesn't preclude you from sending me RR's in the future ;)
CM.
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Not at all, this piece was actually originally written in 2006 and posted in haste to a myspace acco.. read moreNot at all, this piece was actually originally written in 2006 and posted in haste to a myspace account (that has since been closed) as means to vent, when my mind and spirit were in a very different place. So that would explain why you can see a different patterns in the creative flows and dialects of my work.
Thanks for being so perceptive and not afraid to say so!
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If you ever feel like it, check out this version:
http://kristinllee.wordpress.com/2013/05/09/.. read moreIf you ever feel like it, check out this version:
http://kristinllee.wordpress.com/2013/05/09/fire-in-my-soul/
slightly different...but the same poem. Again, I really appreiate your critique :) That's how we grow as writers and how we turn past flops, like this one, into something decent.
I write with a no holds barred attitude, wielding my pen like a dagger to carve tales of fiction entwined with hard and bitter truths. My work generates bold, sometimes dark and devious stories that .. more..