Fire In My Soul

Fire In My Soul

A Poem by Kristin Lee
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Claim Yourself!

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A fire, mimicking redemption

Rages deep within my soul 

My mind puckers like angry water desperately trying to slosh the flames out

Seeking sense in the carnage that burns below

  Neither emotion nor logic will let the show go

 Two polar opposites

Fighting to gain control

Of an unbridled spirit that can never be tamed.

© 2013 Kristin Lee


Author's Note

Kristin Lee
This was originally written in 2006 and was revamped in 2013. Thanks for reading. And and reviews are appreciated!

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To tame the untameable...an interesting idea. I like the juxtaposition in this one. You used a lot of fire imagery, which always gets to me, because I think fire is extremely beautiful and powerful in terms of writing--it can both give life and take it in one swoop. Well written.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kristin Lee

10 Years Ago

Thanks! I too like fire when it comes to imagery, its just so passionate and raw with its need for .. read more



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Very riveting and profoundly original. You've outdone yourself very well with this piece. Great write. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kristin Lee

10 Years Ago

Thank you
To tame the untameable...an interesting idea. I like the juxtaposition in this one. You used a lot of fire imagery, which always gets to me, because I think fire is extremely beautiful and powerful in terms of writing--it can both give life and take it in one swoop. Well written.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kristin Lee

10 Years Ago

Thanks! I too like fire when it comes to imagery, its just so passionate and raw with its need for .. read more
" Two polar opposites

Fighting to gain control

Of an unbridled spirit that can never be tamed."
You are on a great roll with lots of great writes and this one is no exception. Well penned and said...Thank you for sharing...:)


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kristin Lee

10 Years Ago

Thank you. I went on hiatus for a while after having two surgeries. It feels really good to be get.. read more
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

Good to know...You are welcome...:)
Fires that can't be put out are the best kind

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kristin Lee

10 Years Ago

Interesting assessment...dangerous, provocative...alluring and oh so dark...speaks to my dark side l.. read more
Ah that heat is always what motivates us isn't it? Who needs tame, lukewarm is overrated, and this is a spirited read my friend...warmed up my dreary, damp day. Much enjoyed.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kristin Lee

10 Years Ago

:) Jack, you crack me up! Thanks again Frieda, you too brightened my day!
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Ha Jack, who knows perhaps you've been and didn't feel the sting!

Good to know, and my.. read more
Jack...

10 Years Ago

Well I was recently blocked...is that the same thing?
Along side of the spirit that can not be changed excitedly stands a spirit of understanding, no shadows, only light. Very nice

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kristin Lee

10 Years Ago

Thanks Jack :) The human spirit is more resilient than we think. It's when we are tested time and .. read more
I enjoyed the spirit of this, but I found the 3rd line to be problematic, as the visual just didnt work for me....also, the rhyme at the end of the 5th seems out of place. Finally,, rages deep within my soul is a line that could use reworking....it's an oft overused line and, from reading your other work, I know you've got far more creativity in you.

None of my critiques come from a negative place, so I hope I this is not taken as such. Keep the spirit of this, but it could use some tweaks. Hopefully this doesn't preclude you from sending me RR's in the future ;)

CM.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Kristin Lee

10 Years Ago

Not at all, this piece was actually originally written in 2006 and posted in haste to a myspace acco.. read more
Kristin Lee

10 Years Ago

If you ever feel like it, check out this version:
http://kristinllee.wordpress.com/2013/05/09/.. read more
How we handle the heat within accentuates our existence

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kristin Lee

10 Years Ago

That is does.

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Tags: poetry, psychology, soul, redemption, fire

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Kristin Lee
Kristin Lee

Portland, OR



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