INCANTATION

06 28 99

Enter my grove
Reside in my ritual
Nourish the clove
That craves the habitual

Tickle the stream
That coyly recoils
In ripples that gleam
Like honeydew oils

Wade through yourself
Discover your blood
Self-baptize yourself
Rejoice in the flood

Stay from the lake
Come whisper with me
Indulge and partake
In seminal spree

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

ooooooooh wow... now this is dark, delicious, and damn stimulating... oh my goodness!!! love the rhymes and the rhythm in this one that adds to the intensity of the concise, powerful lines... the second stanza has to be my favorite.. HOT... wheeeew..... I love the way your mind works sir... This has to be one of my favorites of yours.. ooooh yes... some steamy imagery going on in my head right now, you naughty thing!! love it!!

[kublakhan27]

So glad you like this one my friend, I had an inkling that you might though it is one of those infamous teasers I'm known for ;P Would you believe this piece will be fifteen years old a week from today?? It's also going to be the first poem in my manuscript...I want this one on page one ;) Your review has me giggling like a schoolgirl...thank you April :) ((hugs))

[AprilRN1210]

well, it is a tease, but a good one... and WOW.. it is that old?... impressive.... you giggling like a school girl?.. now that is some funny imagery right there... would pay to see it.. ha! ((hugs)) back to you my friend...

[kublakhan27]

Haha I should charge admission for it cuz I don't giggle often ;P

[Matching Socks]

Oh for heaven sake, why do you tease me so, with such playful little rhymes.
Have you no shame? :)
(Yes, of course I like it.)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Actually I have more shame than I know what do with...the poetry is just my alter-ego...glad you enjoyed it Ana :)

[Matching Socks]

Lol! :)
Great idea, I need an alter-ego.

[kublakhan27]

Haha Nah, you're already perfect love ;)

[Matching Socks]

Yeah but the hubby likes it when I dress up...

[kublakhan27]

Haha Well that's different, I think ;P

[Matching Socks]

He keeps talking about a lasso of truth too...?
I dunno.
God I hope he doesn't read this anytime soon...

[kublakhan27]

Hahaha A lasso? Hmm...

[Lyn Anderson]

I like this a lot. You started with the subtle embedded references way back in the day apparently. One thing, and don't shoot me, because this is an old poem I realize, and has stood as is for a long time. Believe it or not every once in a while I will go back and tweak an oldie -- third stanza, the repetition of yourself when none of the poem is repetitive like that, not sure it fits -- what about discover the blood in the font of self baptism, or some other type thing? Sorry, probably stuck my paws too far in -- but really, a great write. Just thought I might stretch you a little.

[kublakhan27]

Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the suggestions :)

[Lyn Anderson]

No problem.:)

[AprilRN1210]

won't let me save in favorites!! stupid site!!! grrrr

[kublakhan27]

Oh I know, trust me...my RRs and library didn't work for a month until this week, and I'm always paranoid now that they're gonna malfunction again without warning...hopefully it's just a brief glitch for you x_x

[AprilRN1210]

I hope so... thanks.. just saved the link.. I am stubborn like that.. lol :P
where there's a will, there's a way!!

[kublakhan27]

Haha Yes I have a bunch of links saved from when I was having the glitches, and I'm pretty sure a few of them belong to you ;)

[Tsukin Archangel]

Wow... this is like... DARK lol. And kinda surprising. It feels like something I'd write lol. IT'S A NICE CHANGE and a very chilling poem~. Made me cringe in a positive way! GOOD JOB!

[kublakhan27]

Haha the reaction to this piece has been interesting cuz some people have said it's beautiful and romantic, and others have said it's dark, even occult-sounding o_o I love it when I get different interpretations though, I wish I could do it with more of my stuff...thanks for the kind words and glad you liked it :)

[Tsukin Archangel]

LOL romantic? I suppose if your "grove" is like a euphimism for something.... along the vaginal lines... but nope thats not what came to mind first, i'd have gone down the occult route >;p

[kublakhan27]

Hahaha it's all good ;)

[Tsukin Archangel]

Lol wazzup anyway? Been awhile

[Pryde Foltz]

I loved the metaphor in this sensual write. I really, really liked.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed this one, thank you Pryde.

[noone]

Very interesting and very good imagery. It reminds me of something Satanic. I like it a lot.

[kublakhan27]

Oh, I didn't mean it to sound evil haha Glad you liked it though, thank you Sammi :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is different for you...a bit of a divergence in style and texture, but I like it. You show your diversity here in that you are writing with more of a sublime and ethereal voice, and I can definitely feel the romance here, even if it is somewhat hidden between the lines. I find romance in torment, beauty in tragedy, but then again, I'm a writer, so what can I say? Lovely...MORE!

[kublakhan27]

Haha I'll admit that I'm proud of this one, but it was written fourteen years ago (WOW) so I was still trying to find my style at that point...eventually I turned towards free verse but am considering trying another one in this form soon just to see if I can still do it...thanks as always my friend :)

[MsJewel]

Lyrical, powerful and quite thought provoking. I enjoyed this very much!

:) Julie

[kublakhan27]

Glad you enjoyed it, thank you Julie :)

[Crazy Cat Man]

powerful piece

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks