DIVINING FOR INTERVENTION

03 13 13

Comfort can be rapidly restored
to the baggy purpose of
my fleece pajamas should
you lay the promise in your presence
off and put to work the tools
of your hedonistic carpentry

To the slick drumming of
your hollow hammers
I would humbly sacrifice
my piteously playful notion
to equate the webbings of
my night threads with
the mine of flesh I lobby
for an invitation to maneuver through
in a game of Find The Easy Button

Conversely? I should have known
how easy you would make it
to embark on a burrow through
my strained button fly

Dimensions of your funneled magnetism
ascertainable with nothing but an eye

Author's Note

I hate it...here's hoping you all don't. Captcha: complin.

Reviews

[KAOlmsted]

I'm wearing my fleece jammy pants right now xD Purple ones, with little pictures of Grumpy all over them xD xD xD Sorry, I don't know why that amused me as much as it did ;-)

I love that word, by the way..."conversely..." and I loved that stanza...it was...titillating, to say the least.

Well, hate is better than indifference. At least you have some passion for the thing. I liked it. As much as some of your other writes? Welllll, no...but even your quote-unquote worst poems are better than a lot of other people's quote-unquote best, and I'm talking broad spectrum here, not just WC...

xoxo

[kublakhan27]

Haha it's actually not a hard mental picture to formulate...I'm wearing Floyd pajamas with the Wall theme for what it's worth ;P

I guess you could call this a failed attempt at subtle eroticism, and the main reason I attempt such subject matter only sporadically...this was kind of a valley between two fairly creative spurts where I wrote a few other things that I think are much stronger...still, as pompous as it probably sounds, I agree wholeheartedly with your final sentiments, so that makes me feel better ;P I'm glad there were some parts you liked, and I'm always happy to hear what you have to say, particularly on my writing cuz you're usually right ;) xoxo

[KAOlmsted]

I'm always right xD and *laugh* @ "as pompous as it probably sounds, I agree wholeheartedly with your final sentiments..." ;-)

It's always my absolute pleasure...I'm off to change out of my jammy pants because it's time to pick up The Kid from school xD Can't show up in jammy pants...although, when we lived in Alaska, I did walk to the liquor store in them xD

xoxo

[kublakhan27]

LOL Well it's true...I'm not a pompous person but again, I don't think that what you said was wrong ;) Pajama pants are like a fashion statement around here, people wear them all the time, which I absolutely loathe, but whatever works I guess haha

I don't think I ever mentioned this but I did live in the Northwest Territories for four months several years ago...I wanted to make it over to Alaska for a visit but I didn't have a passport and work didn't leave me with any time to do it anyway ;P xoxo

[KAOlmsted]

Alaska sucked. I was there for three and a half years. Go look at my photos sometime, I have a picture of the boat we used to live on. The boat was awesome (a converted 70 foot tug) and the view was breathtaking, but the day to day living sucked.

[kublakhan27]

I did see the photos, and I know just how you felt...the scenery was really all there was to enjoy on a lot of days...plus there were only a couple of hours of darkness a night when I was there, and I never did adapt in my whole time there, and worked sixty hours a week...I definitely owe a portion (but only one portion) of my insomniac tendencies to that time x_x

[KAOlmsted]

I'm just happy to be in sunny, warm Florida now...I have no intention of ever moving. I'm old, after all...nearly retirement age at any rate xD

[kublakhan27]

I don't blame you, I'd say you're in a pretty comfortable spot at this point ;) I, on the other hand, come from a place where it's said that if you don't like the weather, wait ten minutes :P

[KAOlmsted]

That was what it was like when I lived in Seattle ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Oh yes, that's not far from BC and it always rains there ;)

[KAOlmsted]

Vancouver is one of my all time favorite cities; it's absolutely gorgeous! I almost moved there but settled for Seattle when the Visa slash citizenship crap proved to be an enormous pain in my a*s xD

[kublakhan27]

Ah I see...Kimmer was almost a Canuck ;) I actually haven't been there yet but a friend of mind lived there for a while and loved it.

[KAOlmsted]

I was just hoping to run into Mike Reno so he'd fall irretrievably in love with me and we'd live happily ever after...it didn't seem like such a convoluted plan back in 1999 xD

[kublakhan27]

LOL I was gonna say something just like that but I didn't think about it till after I posted :D

[KAOlmsted]

xD

[kublakhan27]

I know you, n'est pas? ;)

[KAOlmsted]

;-) So well...

[kublakhan27]

;)

[Taylor H.]

This was a fantastic read

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Taylor, I'm glad you like it^^

[Taylor H.]

welcome :)

[B-poet]

Intriguing and philosophically eloquent. Love the overall tone and theme for this particular piece you've contrived so well. Great write friend. :)

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks my friend :)

[kublakhan27]

This is lovely my friend, to me it feels like two in love, and are building a certain erotic peak, through beautiful implanted metaphors here very cleverly used... it could seem a robot love, or a wooden doll love, even Pinocchio went through my mind, don't ask me why.... your male technical puzzle's give me such thoughts. Ha... however, it shows, here also how clever you are, to make us think, and we love that here... :) Perfectly mysteriously waved my friend. And ofcourse I love the music... :)

- Elisa

[kublakhan27]

Haha Pinocchio...it's okay, I won't ask ;) I think this can apply to various couples at various stages of their development, even those that don't mean to develop at all if you know what I mean haha I'm glad that it was still deep enough to make you think though, and I thought the song was a good fit...thank you Elisa :) xo

HAHAHAHAHA...... ;)
You're welcome my Puzzle friend :)

[kublakhan27]

LOL ;D

; D he he

[kublakhan27]

Just noticed you're the featured review too ;)

Oooh my, what an honor lol... ;) I see it now too hehe... it's all Pinocchio's fault ;) :P

[kublakhan27]

Haha yeah poor Pinocchio seldom caught a break ;)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Okay, so I'm guilty... I'm thinking the obvious, but you have put a twist on it, with your own creative "touch"...lol
This piece embodies your playful brilliance...a unique journey of words cleverly weaved. NICELY DONE! ~xo~:)

[kublakhan27]

Haha rarely am I satisfied with my writing if there is no twist involved, even an obvious one ;P I consider you one of the authorities on erotic writing in these parts so your assessments go a long way in telling me if I've succeeded or not in getting my message across ;) Thank you Robbie :) xox

[Androglossia]

It looks to me like you are more inclined in writing more about the things associated to stimulation:) Correct me if I'm wrong but this is not the first read from you that seems to deal with flying solo :P Sorry to have said that, Steve, but I feel the need to say it otherwise my thoughts will be in vain. Your muse must be very advantageous and is worthy enough to inspire you to write such remarkable piece. I find this write sexy and edgy at the same time.

[kublakhan27]

Ah you know me so well Maryanne ;P It's not the first time I've tinkered with the solo concept and I'm sure it won't be the last, though I really wanted this one to be a statement of mutual fulfillment...but the edge and the frustration won out, as they inevitably seem to do with me...in fact, I was worried that the degree of edginess in this one would eclipse the element of sexiness, so I'm relieved to hear that this didn't happen...of course, the relief comes from the fact that this is your assessment...what can I say, you just know :)

[Androglossia]

Lol, I was hesitant to post my review because I was worried I might offend the great Steve Fortune and was really hoping my assesment would not be too far out:)

[kublakhan27]

Haha And the magnificent Maryanne should never worry about such things ;) You know you're never off in your assessments of my words, and I think it's safe to say at this point that you cannot offend me :)

[Androglossia]

Good to finally know:P

[kublakhan27]

Hehe ;P

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAutho..]

Well, Steve (some day you must formally introduce me my Khan), I don't hate it but if there are layers of hidden profundity here then I'm not seeing it. As the proverbial "they" are wont to say, deep in the hills of Kentucky and Tennessee, "Every dog has his day." This is the dog seeking that day and, after that, a good scratch behind the ear and a snooze in the sun on the old wooden porch... right there, just beside the rocking chair. Careful you mind the tail now. [Don't you just *love* writing in dialect?! :D]

[kublakhan27]

Haha I guess this one is an anomaly for me in the fact that there are few layers to be found, and maybe even less profundity...maybe I needed a break from excessive dialect, not that I don't love it, as you've undoubtedly guessed by now ;D I'd also love to be tickled under my chin sometime but that's another story...thank you as always my friend :)

[Ufi Auttorri ~ UfoAuthor]

Ha! ...good luck with the chin scratch'n! ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks, I need all the luck I can get ;)

[Pete Langley]

So easy for a poet to hide his lust in words, wrap his passion in jammies, titivate the palate with a taste of anticipated rumpy. Does it for me, Steve. No need to worry, mate....just keep partying with the pen! P.

[kublakhan27]

Haha very true my friend...thank you for the support, I will continue to party to the best of my ability :)

[Pete Langley]

I forgot to mention I adore the title - I`d buy it off you, but I`ve run out of dinars and I`ve only shekels to rub together. P

[kublakhan27]

Haha took forever to come up with it...I spend a LOT of time pondering over titles...glad you like it :)

[DIVYA]

This made for a very different kind of read...
To me it felt full of a playful wry sarcasm...Telling a lover to really get to work! A request disguised in a differently done package.

"Conversely? I should have known
how easy you would make it
to embark on a burrow through
my strained button fly" - I had fun trying to figure it out.

It made for a very nice read. Thanks.

[kublakhan27]

This certainly has a different feel than a lot of what I've been writing lately, but wryness has been cited by many as a trademark of mine so I think that just came through naturally haha Glad you had fun with it :)

[Frieda P]

Even though you're in your baggy jammies and letting your hair down, I feel a seething frustration lifting off the page. Like an unattainable goal that's within arm's reach but can't be seen by the defining eye...or you want to be a woman, I can't make up my mind. Kidding about that last part...per your work, I'll have to read this ten thousand times and get a different impression each time. You're exhausting hon. ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha I never get frustrated...well yes, I guess I do...a lot ;P If I'm good at anything, I suppose it's writing about those unattainable goals...I actually did try putting myself into a woman's shoes for this one (figuratively now haha) but it was scary so I didn't stay long...still not as scary as my own mind, but scary enough ;) So what you are left with here I guess is typical me, and my knack for exhaustion, at least poetically...I don't know how it would translate literally ;P