WE HAVE LIVED

WE HAVE LIVED

A Poem by kublakhan27
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We have lived
like grounded magpies
having to choose between flight
and a grip on a book of matches

Ill-fated wicks
illuminate frozen gazes
into its flame
then dry out and capsize
stirring congealed syrups
of mourning

We do unto flint
what fate has done unto us
sculpting its yellow mission
into little black hourglasses
strewn about our feet
like schools of lost minnows

Our living rooms
settle for shrines of wax
We settle for ways
of an orphaned shepherd
unhinging our dams of emotion
on the infernos assaulting
our family trees
encroaching on whatever
flora remains
in our field of lonely futures

© 2013 kublakhan27



Author's Note

kublakhan27
In time, the best memories will rise to the surface, but not before sadness runs it course.

The opening stanza was inspired by The Fate of the Magpie...and Me by Girl Friday (http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/GirlFriday/1179366/). She's one of my favourite poets so I hope she doesn't mind :)

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"...like grounded magpies..." --made me smile.

"...stirring congealed syrups of mourning..." --dude.

"...encroaching on whatever
flora remains
in our field of lonely futures..." --got it but...the entire stanza before it was like (to some, perhaps) what?? *laugh*

(an?)

Sorry, I seem to have just cut and pasted and told you how awesome *laugh* Meh...This is me gushing on your pages, babe. You must be used to it ;-)

xoxo

Posted 4 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

KAOlmsted

4 Years Ago

That's right, I was too busy admiring my own reflection in the water to notice xD Meanwhile, I'm of.. read more
kublakhan27

4 Years Ago

Haha you do that too? ;P I must clean my kitchen as well, I just have to pull my butt away from this.. read more
kublakhan27

4 Years Ago

Pull my butt away from the site, I should say, not your page ;P



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Awesome write!!!!!! a lot heart and depth in this:)))))))))))))))))))

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Thank so much for the kind words Jonathan :)
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3 Years Ago

Your very welcome:))))))))))))))))))
This is one of the best things i have read in here!!
I can't find the words...

K.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much K, this is one I hold close to the heart, so glad you enjoyed it.
K.N. Lorenzen

3 Years Ago

You bet I did :)
Very cool work my friend and a very wonderful inspiration. Sarah is very good.

I have always been fascinated by the Magpie and I just love that opening verse.

Very well written my friend.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

She is one of my favourites on the site. If you've talked to Frieda today, you may have an inkling .. read more
The greatness of our knowledge or of our prevision could not alter the systematic clockwork that we live by or we are bound to live for nor could it put a stop to that infamous finale we so loathed. Until then we must put into consideration everything that made sense to us the most. Another great work from you, Steve.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

4 Years Ago

I always thought that freedom is a myth, even with the luxury of free will, and even that is hardly .. read more
The metaphors fly with feverish brilliance...
A very intense piece that captures....

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

4 Years Ago

Thank you Priscilla :) I'm glad you were able to tap into the intensity of what is a pretty personal.. read more
Priscilla Sayers

4 Years Ago

getting there, Love:)
kublakhan27

4 Years Ago

I'm happy to hear that my friend :)
This is why I read your stuff.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

4 Years Ago

Many thanks my friend.
I feel the lost, the richness, into your roots, dear. I liked this one, for it says much about the history, and also about "the YOU" and I placed "the" infront, because I love to speak the german term here.
You have a rich poetic soul full of feeling, and all it needs... thankies bud!

Hope you're well. I no quote a thing here, for it's all felt in my core.

- Elisa

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend :) As I was saying to Robbie, this is a personal piece and I'm rarely su.. read more

4 Years Ago

Yes, be well dear friend, thinking of you, I understand you... in all you said... I'm not feeling so.. read more
I never thought I could be speechless...well, you have done it!
This leaves me awestruck... loved the downward spiral of this piece... what a journey! (a mind trip at it's finest)
"We do unto flint
what fate has done unto us
sculpting its yellow mission
into little black hourglasses
strewn about our feet
like schools of lost minnows"~ My favorite stanza! :)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

4 Years Ago

Haha I feel humbled ;) I'm glad you like this one...it's a personal piece so I'm happy that the inte.. read more
Robbie~xoxo~

4 Years Ago

my pleasure... you did GF proud! ~xoxo~:)
This is druidic in its intensity, and yes the flames still burn in some of us.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

4 Years Ago

Glad you liked it my friend...I constantly wonder if the fires will ever subside...

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Nova Scotia, Canada



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