CANDLE LOGIC

CANDLE LOGIC

A Poem by kublakhan27
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Let's apply oblation to our hardships
Obliterate the temptation 
to trip on languid lower lips
imprisoning our stiffer upper lips
Let's apply oblation to our grief
Freeze the imitation waterfalls 
of hot wax sliding through 
the slippery stalagmites
scaling the perimeters of
our duet of melting candles
Let us groom the fire for oblation
like the old Greeks did and
take a flyer on the 
possibility of comfort
Let us take a lesson from
the pond of hot wax 
destined to rebel and drown
the wick before it brands 
lethargy on the local phoenix

© 2013 kublakhan27


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Author's Note

kublakhan27
I put this together in ten minutes. I don't like posting things I put together in ten minutes, but you know how it is as a writer...there are some things that just have to be said.

Props go out to Frieda for a subtle suggestion that made me like the poem more than I initially did ;) Mind you, "like" is a relative word there...


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Deep sigh here, although I"ve read it already, it's still affecting, not to mention your genius in slapping it together, but the effect from the standpoint of grief. We share this similar pain, and I found the title to make sense in some strange comforting way, 'logic' is there any when it comes to this pain and suffering, only within the rituals and sacrifices we make getting to the point to make it possible to get to that next day, sometimes that next minute in time. You know I 'felt' this one my dear friend. xo

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

We cope in very similar ways my dear...sadly there have been way too many instances to allow me to c.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Okay hon, you have finished me off with the music now.... much love my sweet friend. xo
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

I've said it before, but I hope you're thinking happy thoughts my dear friend...xo



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Brilliant metaphors. It takes a philosophical mind to write something as deep as this. Applause! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

So glad you enjoyed it, thank you Blue :)
Its the flow I like here. And I like it a lot. It is indeed like the melted wax flowing down a candle. It is indeed smooth. A well composed (ten minute?) write that seeks the corners and hidden places of my mind.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

I'm a big fan of flow and rhythm, and try to work them into my poetry as much as I can. So glad you.. read more
I found the way in which you incorporated process of melting candle wax, very clever, a really enjoyable poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

So glad you enjoyed it, many thanks.
Hi Bro,

I know, since the last time we spoke, I got a review on this one, I shall not post here right now, for I think I understand this one much better now, so here's my next try lol....
I feel grief, in this one, rebirth, and a strong bond and togetherness with a special person ;)
A connection to be one, in hard times, with each other. And as I said before, wow, in 10 minutes, and still you're insecure, of how it turned out, (it did so well). You write like a god, in English!

I found it very symbolic, and logic all the same way. Selfless too.
Great work my dear.

- Elisa

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

10 Years Ago

I'm glad this one was a bit more on point lol ;) You're the very best friend, bro, and soul one can .. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

That goes for you too sis, love and hugs :) xo

10 Years Ago

Awwwwe xoxo :)
10 minutes! Wow such symbolic freedom tones, very rhythmic in the inflamed you urn to hold and burn away any day dyer flutters wanting to get too close...amazing piece

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Being a personal piece, I think this one may have been written in my subconscious for a while, as I .. read more
And this is why people read you...those concluding lines should be quoted in literature classes to come.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks for the humbling words my friend, greatly appreciated.
Enjoy the way the imagery is consistent !

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thank you my friend.
Ahhh . . . There is a deep and resounding thought process which caused these words to be written. And, after they have been writ, there is a deep and resounding thought process occurring this reader as I delve into its murky, but exhilarating revelations your words bring to the forefront.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Yeah I knew when I wrote it, even way back then, I knew there would be murkiness involved. Glad you.. read more
Lovely poem. I enjoyed reading this :D :D

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much :D
I'm not sure I fully understand what you are saying, and therefore the poem really, really makes me think. I like that. The rhythm is beautiful. This poem makes me want to sing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thank you Laura, so glad it struck a chord (no pun intended haha) with you :)

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Added on October 23, 2013
Last Updated on October 24, 2013
Tags: mourning, candle, hope, stiff upper lip, oblation, comfort, phoenix

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kublakhan27

Nova Scotia, Canada



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