PASS THE SYRUP

PASS THE SYRUP

A Poem by kublakhan27
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03 29 14

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Olive branches smother and dismember
in the mud giggling in time
with the squish emanating from
my alternating huff and puff
footprints

I trudge in Winter's sweat of
schizophrenic rain
My old defence, sheepish stolidity,
got tweaked in a twist-up
tight as a candy cane
with a modest gasp
of underground success

That shadowy hush of acknowledgement
ballooned in my ear like a blow fish
amplifying the environmental inertia
that never made me happier
nor this sad

I may have been mad
walking from informed opinions
like a failed Orpheus
but defence shouted in silence
and I returned home
to the unconditional support
of a pet art

Acknowledgement's shadowy hush
tore a blister trail down my back
The ointment of Winter will soothe and
release me before billing me
with a scar and littering in the recycle bin
of who I want to be

Today I wanted to be accepted
Night has arrived with reinforced snowflakes
and the chill on my hot back
has me wondering if I would rather be feared


© 2014 kublakhan27



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Ahhh...Steve. I know where this one comes from and its sadness makes me sigh. I would hug you but youre too far away. Sweetie you dont want to be feared...theres no good in that. You just want to feel accepted and acknowledged. You dont need to look much farther then right here for that. You are an amazing poet and a wonderful friend. ;-)

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kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

You have brought a smile to my face and my heart my dear friend...I don't think hearts smile but you.. read more



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This is a nice one with rich imagery. Well done.

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kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Many thanks my friend
Onyia-ota, Kingsley Chukwuebuka

3 Years Ago

You're highly welcome.
Such intense struggle in this piece. I feel the gnawing frustration, the desperation, the confusion of acknowledgement and acceptance. The bitter, cold loneliness erodes the soul that is already eaten away by neglect and damage. It is numb but those frosty fingers can also stimulate those piercing pangs of painful memories. I am blown away by this piece: breathtaking metaphors, stunning imagery, and raw, powerful emotion. Awesome..

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kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much April, I'm glad that it resonated with you so deeply :)
AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

Welcome so much:)
" That shadowy hush of acknowledgement
ballooned in my ear like a blow fish". I love these lines!

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kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Thanks bud, I'm glad you like this one :)
Lovely once again something new and different and never gets boring!!!!

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kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Star :)
Wow Steveroo, where do I even begin to interpret this amazing poem. It is filled with so much emotion it's unbelievable. That is something that your writes never lack - emotion. It is always filled to the brim and your heart is always, always on the page.

I agree with what Red has said to you, I second that infact. Smart woman she is. ;-) You are such a talented, amazing man, you just don't see it. You're my best friend and so kind and caring - realise it dude! Or I will have to find some way to make you.......... dun dun dun!

xo

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kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

You always know how to bring a smile to my face Noodlebop, on days when it doesn't feel like an opti.. read more
s y e

3 Years Ago

You're so kind Steveroo and loving. We all love you here so much at WC and you know that we're alway.. read more
I don't think it's fear exactly at least for me. The older I get it becomes more like 'f**k you if you don't get me' lol

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kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Haha It varies from day to day Mark...thanks for the read and comment.
"The ointment of Winter will soothe and
release me before billing me
with a scar and littering in the recycle bin
of who I want to be"

I adore this imagery. Mr. Winter mending the wounds that he inflicts, but only with numbness from cold, and then to bill you with a scar. I mean this is slick! I know it is a poem about hurting, but it is a brilliant write... Thank you

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kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Streamline...this one came from deep within so I'm happy to hear that it resonated wi.. read more
This is the LSD of poetry, so many years ago I partook of all things crazy: This poem reminded of that, me and the girls dancing on tables and staying awake for days: I love how some poetry takes you to a place perhaps the poet did not envisage, of course I suspect such journeys happen often. Acceptance was so often the next step to settling down, warm and passive. It is something I fear, still. Thank you for this wonderfully imagined poem.
-x-

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kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

What can I say, you speak my language with stunning precision here Rosalind...I've never danced on a.. read more
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Wow this poem has my mind wheeling in images and ideas. The symbolism of winter and it's arctic chill soothing the burning overflow of emotions is a lovely image! I can get insnared in your word play, as they interweave in my head, leaving me tangled in your thoughts. What a wonderful write!

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kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much for the kind words K, so glad you enjoyed it :)

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Nova Scotia, Canada



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