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A Poem by kublakhan27
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Dead weight
clamping down like a shadow
without prejudice

I am dead weight
except for the fault line
furrowing through my brain's
allocating swirls
That's where my initiatives
huddle like autumn-butchered leaves
in a gutter

Please spare me of
another branch of time to kill
except for the one that keeps it
Then I'll take the nagging
Machiavellian
business of memories
down with it

© 2014 kublakhan27



Author's Note

kublakhan27


Written in 2001, tinkered with slightly today...I was such a cute little cynic back then...

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i see this is an early one for you .. its very powerful i think ... inside a duplicit mind ..aaaaargh! like a giant spider has spun it full of thick sticky webs .. good luck unraveling .. eeeyow! .. enjoyed your poem very much .. its a brain teaser for sure and vivid descriptive word choices .. nice one kubla!
E.

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kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

It is an early one indeed but I wonder if anyone would have even noticed if I hadn't mentioned it..... read more



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Well being a teenager is like a breeding ground for cynism...that and letting yourself get old too soon but it seems you have left the childish games behind you and today my son...you are a man. Enjoyed muchly as I do every write of yours.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

A teenager with bipolar is pretty much doomed...it's taken a couple of decades but I think I've fina.. read more
i see this is an early one for you .. its very powerful i think ... inside a duplicit mind ..aaaaargh! like a giant spider has spun it full of thick sticky webs .. good luck unraveling .. eeeyow! .. enjoyed your poem very much .. its a brain teaser for sure and vivid descriptive word choices .. nice one kubla!
E.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

It is an early one indeed but I wonder if anyone would have even noticed if I hadn't mentioned it..... read more
You always make me think KK.Sometimes we need to take a break and rest and look at things with fresh eyes to see what needs to be done.Excelent lines my friend :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Thanks as always for the kind words Vidya, so glad you enjoyed it :)

Steve
Vidya Bacchus

3 Years Ago

You are very welcome Steve :)
Thought provoking to say the least. Sometimes we just need to pock ourselves up brush away the dust and start again.

Troy

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Very true my friend, it's a process but it's finally starting to happen haha Thank you Troy :)
You paint very distinct, painful imagery with your words. Something about your poems and the depth with which your feelings are transmitted awes, for your portrayals are greatly penetrative. Your poetry is the kind I can read and reflect on. These are thoughts and feelings of purposelessness that unfortunately drain us of the impetus to do something self-fulfilling, but we cannot give up on finding something to keep us going. For me, poetry is just one of the handful of things I adhere to (and yes it doesn’t necessarily make one an optimist, but within it you find motivation and ambition to say the least that enable you to inspire others (such as myself)). We’re nor dead weight, friend.

Thanks for sharing this one.

W.H.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

I understand just where you're coming from my friend...your reviews are poetic in themselves...I can.. read more
Wall Hermitt

3 Years Ago

You're most welcome, friend!
Wall Hermitt

3 Years Ago

Thanks for the great words!
its like a cluttered mess, that you hate to visit, but you know that if you could just organize it, clean it up, knock the dust off, find that one piece that you put somewhere a long time ago, then things would get working right again.. that you would be able to fix things... at least that is how I feel sometimes.. lol
definitely makes you think with this one sir..

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Looking back at my notebooks, I came to the conclusion that 2001 was THE year when I really started .. read more
AprilRN1210

3 Years Ago

((hugs)) I did enjoy.. you're more than welcome..
kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

((hugs)) :)
I am dead weight
except for the fault line
furrowing through my brain's
allocating swirls

This verse called out to me, I enjoyed the imagery in it. Great write!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

So glad you enjoyed it, thank you Ashira :)
And like the falling leaves of November our mind never seems to stop. Like so many things it isn't about completion, it is about maintenance.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Very true, you always have a great grasp of where I'm coming from in any given poem...thank you Cory.. read more
Honey you are not dead weight. You are a true poet

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much K...you know how it goes with me, the eternal pessimist haha You always give me confi.. read more
Kleio13

3 Years Ago

I wouldn't say eternal pessimistic. But you are more essential than you think you are
my initiatives already fell off the tree...my autumn is near, and the nagging memories of what i could have been...they are already dead leaves in a gutter of lost opportunity.
sometimes i also feel like dead weight...like what am i actually contributing to this world...
anything worthwhile? or am i just an existence.

as always your writes create introspection...

much of it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

3 Years Ago

I think we all ask those questions from time to time, we writers just happen to ask them more freque.. read more

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