BLURRING THE DYNAMICS

Notes below...09 10 14

Be wary of the chasm
of tangled blood blurring
the dynamics of loving somebody
and liking the same person

Be wary of the chasm
of hot-buttered blood blurring
corneas claiming to discern
the dynamics of loving somebody
and loving the same body

Be wary of the chasm
of screaming blood blurring
(via tongues of fire)
the dynamics of a bleeding sunset
and a bludgeoned bond

Be wary of the chasm
of conspirative blood blurring
the dynamics of an emblematic
bath in ambition's settled debt
and a wallow in the pink taint
of a tool's guilty conscience

Be wary of the chasm

Author's Note

Third stanza, based on Edvard Munch's quote on 'The Scream' painting:

"I was walking along the road with two friends - watching the sunset - the sky suddenly turned red as blood - I stopped, leant against the fence, deadly tired - avove the blue-black fjord and the town lay blood and tongues of fire - my friends walked on and I was left, trembling with fear - and I could feel an infinte scream passing through the landscape"

I did not know this until gathering the quotes for this poem, but this painting was also inspired by the death of Munch's sister to tuberculosis...this will likely get worked into another poem at some point in the future.

Fourth stanza, based on Shakespeare's 'Julius Caesar':

BRUTUS:

People, and senators, be not affrighted.
Fly not; stand still; ambition's debt is paid.

3.1. 82-3

BRUTUS:

So we are Caesar's friends, that have abridged
His time of fearing death. Stoop, Romans, stoop,
And let us bathe our hands in Caesar's blood
Up to the elbows, and besmear our swords
Then walk we forth, even to the market place,
And waving our red weapons o'er our heads,
Let's all cry, "Peace, freedom, and liberty!"

CASSISUS:

Stoop then, and wash. How many ages hence
Shall this our lofty scene be acted over
In states unborn and accents yet unknown!

3.1, 104 - 113

Reviews

[Ashira Macy]

My goodness, this one really brings the reader into a black hole of betrayal and loss. I know of The Scream, as well as Julius Cesar, though I can honestly say that I don't know much about them. I have always preferred Shakespeare's comedies to any of his other writing. They make more sense to me. That being said, I really enjoyed this poem, the repetition and slight changes to certain lines worked really well (did you use a fixed form or is this your own concoction?)

of hot-buttered blood blurring

My favorite line because of how fun it is to say in an evil voice. =P Really brilliant work on this my friend!

[kublakhan27]

So glad you felt the emotion in this one my friend...it was an emotional write, and my own form...maybe I should patent it haha ;) I think I had a monotone voice in my mind when I wrote it, Allen Ginsberg to be exact...not many are familiar with his spoken word stuff anymore, but if there's one poet I would have loved to hear recite my work, it would have been him...but I'm digressing :P An evil voice certainly works as well...Vincent Price or Christopher Lee would be nice...

Not sure why I'm pondering voices all of a sudden...probably cuz I'm conscious of your stage background now ;)

Thanks so much for the kind words Ashira, you have brought a smile to my face indeed :)

[Ashira Macy]

Haha, well I am going to have to look up Allen Ginsberg's spoken voice now. No need to ponder voices for my sake, though if you like to do so then by all means, ponder away! Glad I could make you smile my friend! =D

[Kleio13]

Wow this poem spoke exactly what I was feeling in a poetic way that I couldn`t even write myself. I don`t know who broke your heart but you didn't deserve it.
These lines " the dynamics of a bleeding sunset
and a bludgeoned bond" emphasized the heartbreak.
Great work Kubby.

K.

[realmwriter]

While I really do like this piece, I am afraid it is a bit outside my realm of understanding. I'll have to come back to this after I look up some references to better understand it.

[kublakhan27]

It's okay, this one came from a pretty deep place so I had a feeling it wouldn't be universally accessible...I just happen to be a Shakespeare buff which I think does me more harm than good sometimes haha So glad you enjoyed it though my friend.

[realmwriter]

Good to know what references to look at. Are you talkin Hamlet or Macbeth or?

[kublakhan27]

Brutus from Julius Caesar was the central inspiration, though now that I look at it again, there are echoes of MacBeth in there as well...

[realmwriter]

I have to admit that I am not very knowledgeable of Shakespeare but I will endeavor to gain such knowledge. After all, how can I call myself a poet if I know little of the greatest of bards?

[kublakhan27]

I honestly don't think that someone have to be 'well-read' to be a good poet...I just happened to study English lit so I got a lot of exposure to a lot of different writers that I may have not bothered with on my own :P

[realmwriter]

Can't hurt though

[Einstein Noodle]

when i read through the first time .. i felt the heaviness of a passion gone wrong .. i read your note... read it again; and its significance stood out for me ...making it a better treat to read .. i appreciate your notes because i never would have made the connections .. it made your poem a full course meal .. i think it is masterfully crafted and well worth the experience of reading .. bravo! nice one Kubla
E.

[kublakhan27]

So glad that this one spoke to you E...everything I write comes from within but this one definitely came from a deeper place...I honestly didn't think much of this one at first but the positive response to it has put my mind at ease :) Your kind words always lift my spirits my friend :)

[Matching Socks]

This is maybe the only poem of yours that I wish I had written, I like the others, but this one really hits the mark for me. Nice job bud. xx

[kublakhan27]

I'm glad that this one is a favourite for you Ana...I really had to dig deep for this one...so glad it resonated with you :)

[R Smith]

Wary! if I see that bloody chasm coming i'm gonna run like hell, loving somebody and liking the same person, not always easy, love the Munch stanza, always loved this painting and the 4th, Caesar, a rare masterpiece, I believe I need this in my library, great work

[kublakhan27]

They are two of my favourite pieces of art...it's a small miracle that they've never been paired up in a poem before though I have written on both separately...so glad you enjoyed it Richard :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Yeah. I think I'm gonna stay out of that chasm

[kublakhan27]

Not a bad idea.

[redzone]

"Et Tu Brute"??? Steve, I do know and understand the "chasm", and for me, it's the only place to live, on it's edge where what matters is that our lover should be our best friend, the one we can share our secrets and our desires, where we are fearless cause there is mutual respect... And I know the dangers this poses, the chances we must take, the daring we need... and so I will always leap into that chasm and feel the blood blurring sword, for such a friend and lover...

your poetry challenges us often to think about how we should live, what our lives should be about and also a warning to would be Brutus' and Cassisus' that want to bloody their swords while shouting pious phrases of "Peace, freedom, and liberty!"

With poems like this one, perhaps Steve you should do more walking along that fjord, for the sunsets not the "The Scream"... your pen is bloody and well tested with this one Steve..
~~redzone

[kublakhan27]

Nothing wrong with that my friend...I don't think I'd ever write a piece saying to stay away from it, just be wary :) Yes, I'm a very wary person (haha, that rhymes), wary of everything...I do enjoy sunsets more than I used to though...they don't bleed on me as much as they used to...

I'm truly humbled and happy to know that my writing has that kind of depth and effect...to say you've made my day with this review is a massive understatement...thank you Curt :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there is a chasm...a deep one sometimes between loving and liking...
we can often love someone, but not like that person because of behavior...

there are those we can love but not live with...I have experienced this enough times...

especially with one of my exes with whom I am still very very close.

[kublakhan27]

To say that I understand would be a vast understatement my friend...thank you Jacob.

[MomzillaNC]

Your meter was great, giving a throbbing intensity to bottomless pit we open in ourselves when we let the wrong people to shape our joys.

[kublakhan27]

So glad that this one spoke to you M, thank you :)

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.